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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Best Poem Your words sparked unpatriotically, the parade advanced slowly, prancing Tennessee Walkers with silver sprayed hooves, riders with Americana smiles. A procession of old tractors rolling red and green, your face drawn and forlorn, kids catching candy necklaces crying child with empty hands. BBQ smoke, dancing on the lawn, you stood quietly and looked on, far off, missing someone, chills crept down my back, an icy trickle in summer heat. My boy won a prize, for best poem on the stage with the others, his proud mamma bursting, emotions mixing white and red, fireworks in my heart. © 2000 CM Bailey |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ Awwwwww ! He must take after his mom. Tell him congratulations from me. How your chest must swell with pride. How his little heart must swell with love. Thank you for sharing .... could we see his poem? Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Sure, Marge, my pleasure, of course! (Big Smile) The Jackal A golden, wild happy feeling in life, you have to go from the bottom to the top of the ceiling. The water is taken from a creek, that supports lives in a weary peak at the future. It is a battle to stay alive, you might have to take a peak at a bee hive. One day a deer came up to me, but after a few seconds it decided to flee. That is how animals act, I hope you can pay attention to that. Jonathon, age 8, 1999 Proud Mamma [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 04-29-2000).] |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Corinne, congrats on your son's talent. I think he'll grow up to write just like his mom! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, this poem made me smile at the proud mamma watching her son..... although after rereading it, I felt a another message coming through, a sad memory mixed in there too. Parker |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
Corinne, I felt I was there eavesdropping. Perhaps you could warm that chill. Congrats to your son. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Such mixed emotion in this poem...Very strong and well done...loved your son's poem! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Lovebug, thanks. Yes, Parker, a sadder message layered in, very perceptive of you! Thanks Pen! Thank you Martie, never pass up a chance to brag! LOL |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
So the apple doesn't fall far from the tree, does it? I'm happy for both of you....and tell him that not all deer flee  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
BBQ smoke, dancing on the lawn, you stood quietly and looked on, far off, missing someone, chills crept down my back, an icy trickle in summer heat. ----------------- Corinne this was so excellent to read... I loved the small town americana parade sights, smells, and sounds, and of course your mothers pride... but the edges of sadness laced in the poem was what made it for me... very well written. A "best poem" for mother and son. His poem was MOST impressive for his age... very cool! ~as always, Take Care,JM~ -------------- I know it's been a long road To get these towns behind me and I Will gladly reap what we may sow-- I am there for you ... and you're there for me ... Are you waiting for Heart in hand Woman and man See me where I stand I am Heart Heart in hand ~vertical horizon~ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Balladeer and Janet Marie, twas a bittersweet moment. Corinne |
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