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The Other Man's Girl
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The Other Man's Girl |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Sometimes I pray for a turn of the page if there's a chill on the air in the room. I hear small voices surface their rage but I'm hoping for a peace easy mood. Sometimes I ride on a heavenly cloud with the taste of your lips on mine. I don't want to be an angel myself but you're taking up all of my time. I know the feelings I've got them myself and we'll have to give them up in time. Someone hurt you and they hurt as well but you've got to stop losing my mind. If I'm not in love I know how it goes and I can't deny the past can be real. I'm not afraid for the work that we've done and I'll wait til your faith can be healed. Sometimes I see through your eyes and you're cold but I'm learning how to bring you up warm. I'm always willing to hear from your soul because the other man left your heart torn. I know there's times when it's so hard to see a heart on a limb in a forest of trees but I keep my vision, my eyes on the world I'm just saving a place for the other man's girl. Every night I can't breathe all alone since I've come to stay close to your side. The other forces we know how they go they're as soothing as oil at the time. Sometimes I wish for a miracle light and I wish that you'd let me come in. Sometimes I find that my thinking's not right and the truth is behind me again. But if I can revive the love that you hide I know your heart can make it again. I'm not beyond the bare truth in time and if it hurts me I'll understand. So if I'm not behind some hope in your mind there's a chance you're second guessing my best, cause I'm way beyond a mere compromise someday I've got to put it to rest. Sometimes I hope for the better or worse somehow I'd like it if there was a plan. but I'm still willing to wait out the curse because I'm nothing like the other man. Sometimes I feel that the caution's untrue sometimes I figure that I should rush in. But I know it's a game I could lose because I'm nothing like the other man. I know at times it's so hard to see a heart on a limb in a forest of trees but I keep my vision, my eyes on the world I'm just saving a place for the other man's girl. Celtrue2000@E3B1G9 |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"I know there's times when it's so hard to see a heart on a limb in a forest of trees" Oh this line above is sooooo visual ... absolutely love it Ethome. Delightfully unique angle you tackled it from in the title and theme ... a wonderful poem, you had me captivated! Well done! Best wishes (and hope it works out)  ,/Kit |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sometimes I ride on a heavenly cloud with the taste of your lips on mine. I don't want to be an angel myself but you're taking up all of my time. I know the feelings I've got them myself and we'll have to give them up in time. Someone hurt you and they hurt as well but you've got to stop losing my mind. If I'm not in love I know how it goes and I can't deny the past can be real. I'm not afraid for the work that we've done and I'll wait til your faith can be healed. Sometimes I see through your eyes and you're cold but I'm learning how to bring you up warm. I'm always willing to hear from your soul because the other man left your heart torn. I know there's times when it's so hard to see a heart on a limb in a forest of trees but I keep my vision, my eyes on the world I'm just saving a place for the other man's girl. Every night I can't breathe all alone since I've come to stay close to your side. The other forces we know how they go they're as soothing as oil at the time. Sometimes I wish for a miracle light and I wish that you'd let me come in. Sometimes I find that my thinking's not right and the truth is behind me again. ---------------- I'm not beyond the bare truth in time and if it hurts me I'll understand. So if I'm not behind some hope in your mind there's a chance you're second guessing my best, cause I'm way beyond a mere compromise someday I've got to put it to rest. Sometimes I hope for the better or worse somehow I'd like it if there was a plan. but I'm still willing to wait out the curse because I'm nothing like the other man. -------------- this is AMAZING... this is EXCEPTIONAL I think I could fly after reading this perfect poem... Ethome, if I said all the things I felt while reading this poem i would be here all day and probably embarrass you with my worshiping... it is for poems like this that I live for poetry thank you. jm |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Kit I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, I enjoyed writing it. Thank you Janet it's always good to hear from you. I love the way you repeat the verses you like. You are so kind. |
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