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put me in your boxes, please
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put me in your boxes, please |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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I watch you put things so many things that you might in the future need in boxes and bags and know deeply know that my life will not sit well with this for I need you my friend despite my putting up a brave front of not no one has touched my life quite as thoroughly as you have from head to toe I am interwoven with you you touched my heart with softness and caring you tempered my head with questions to make me think you heated my body with craving unmatched you made me see me as a friend worth having please don’t forget to put little bits of me in your boxes too, my friend put my naughty smiles and erotic tidbits of memory oh...how we played put my rolling on the floor giggles to authenticate our laughter put remembrance of the tears that you helped me dry and the soul delving that made us the friends that we are and put the days that were made just to share you and me yes put me in your boxes so that when you get to where you get you will remember a friend in me [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This is very touching, Corazon! Thanks for sharing. Peace! Nathan |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
It was a great read..we plan on so many things to leave out something so beautiful..so necessary to our hearts. (((((((hugs))))))) A_L |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Oh sweetheart...I could be wrong but I'm hoping the same....for all of us, that we each retain a little of the fun, the wicked, wacky sense of humour we all enjoy and the seriousness of our discussions but most of all, I hope the caring continues even if packed in a box, maybe a memory, maybe in a thought that reminds us but always, I hope we remember the friendships and what it brought to all of us... Beautiful words, just like you...got a tissue? Guess shares in Kleenex rose again tonight..  Take care...all of you! HUSG |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
rg you have mail explaining this...lol...and yep, it did make me think of some who have moved on and of all the fun we used to have on thrive....guess nothing stays the same for ever...specially the kleenex shares...lol...big hugs lady thanks A L glad you liked nate, glad you liked [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Hi corazan... this is a really great piece! Very visual and exciting and correct me if I'm wrong, but i thought i detected a bit of sarcasm with the "go ahead and put memories of me in boxes, too" theme. oftentimes, I don't read the responses before I reply... I want to get the full flavor of the poem without reading what others say first. This time, though, I read the responses and now i'm confused. At first I thought this was about a past "in person" relationship, and then you & RG refer to memories from 'thrive' as if they relate to this poem... LOL... so... I'm confused as to whether this piece is about 'virtual' friendship/romance/memories or 'in person' friendship/romance/memories. hehe... maybe it doesn't matter and you don't really need to answer but if you care to explain, I'd be curious! either way, thanks for a great read! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
well doreen, you said "I'm confused as to whether this piece is about 'virtual' friendship/romance/memories or 'in person' friendship/romance/memories" lets see yes and no...or no and yes..lol..how about a little of all of them.... rg and I have been friends for a long time, and we have seen quite a few people move away and not come back...and a close friend of ours just relocated, just making us realize how fragile these long distance friendships are...and ...my muse was being melodramatic as another friend is moving also....none of whom are leaving me behind....but...this poem is what came out *g* so now I am sure that you are very clear on this....right?????? lol....well, I tried to be helpful....but my mind is not a clear place to be these days...sigh glad you liked and the sarcasm?...you probably read right, that seems to be a theme in my thinking too.... oh, and I haven't seen any of your poems submitted for the book yet.....'twoudln't be complete without some of your works ms. doreen [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Corazan: I dont have mail..  but I'll go check all my addresses in a moment in case it got picked up someplace else......hope so but if not could you forward to 'themail' address... HUSG Doreen: I guess I read this poem correctly and yes, Cor and I have been friends for near on 2 years and were very close to a group of 5/6 people, and I mean close....we shared our problems, our lives and our innermost thoughts...some of us still do and we also have a new person to that group (that I'm thinking of, especially today) but I guess relationships change and it tilts the balance for all of us, sadly...but thankfully memories will always remain because nothing can ever change laughter or closeness whatever happens in the future, memories are built in concrete the future however is built in dust... HUGS [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
rg, yep you read it right, lol, bits and pieces of the present and the past all rolled up into one...and yep, it did go to themail, guess its just slow going today and yep me too...bout today I even sent HT winging over to watch over her |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Corazon...great read...i enjoyed this one! ~Lorraine< !signature--> A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur [This message has been edited by Lorraine Nisbet (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
ok, I'm off to check 'themail' and I was thinking of HT only tonight bless...thank heavens I'm still the same, even if the words get angry soemtimes...the heart is till the same ....ooops...giving my secrets away.. HUSG |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
thanks for the explanation, ladies... i'm still confused, but that's about par for the course for me at the moment... LOL enjoyed the poem very much, corazon.. as usual thanks for the comment about my work... don't know if i'll submit to the book or not, though.. hope you do! oh, and you have mail from me, too  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Such a sublime message, very touching.... well done poem, and very strong emotions expressed using beautiful words... I enjoyed this one... regards, sudhir |
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Jan Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 114 |
Great poem. I believe that anytime you touch someone's soul a piece of you stays with them forever. Even if they don't always know it. Peace. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks all, this one's not so sad like lots of mine are, so glad to make you smile |
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