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My Juliet
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My Juliet |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina 
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One voice cries out among thousands Can anyone hear? Does anyone care? His head turns, He's searching He feels her despair He can taste her fury, Her madness He tries desperately to find her To break through the masses that bind her Her volume is rising, climbing As he runs to her, flies to her, Races against time to her Monsterous thunder! Flash of light! "Oh my darling, my beloved!" So silent, so still He collapses by her side Blood turns to ice at the sight She is gone, lost in her plight He lowers his head One tear falls Then another, another, another Her face is wet, His tears on her eyes Which no longer see through his sorrow's disguise He's running, running, Away from this place Where she met her fate Where his love came too late And now I live In a world I call my own, It's always nice when no one's home.... *Lit |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Wow, I'm impressed. Very shakespearian. I liked it and so I voted for it  Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear... -Metallica- |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
what can i say??? wow!!! you left me speechless...something that i never am...you got my vote... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Hey kids, thank you for your kind words. I honestly have no idea where this poem came from. I was just sitting in my English class last school year and my pen wrote it. But it left me with a creepy feeling, so I thought I'd share it w/ y'all. *~Meredith~* And now I live In a world I call my own, It's always nice when no one's home.... *Lit |
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sherm Member
since 2000-07-21
Posts 94Evansville,IN |
cool poem its really good creepy how it just came from nothing but thats kinda cool too well anyways good job and keep writing |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
What a wounderful poem. I think you did a great job and keep it up. Lovely_Kris |
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Enchanted Star Junior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 14New Port Richey, FL |
Wow! This is very good. Your very talented! CindyLuC |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Hey....great poem! I can see why everybody likes it. It's beautifully vivid and the setting you provide is wonderful! Thanks for sharing this great piece! Salooma (I'm back!) |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Great poem. I enjoyed reading it, it was almost like a story. Keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "True love last forever" |
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Tara Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 76Minnesota |
all i can say is wow. excellent work. Tara |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Definitely sounds like Romeo and Juliet to me...exellent work, I enjoyed it greatly!  *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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Isabelle Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176Indiana |
I really liked this poem. You did a wonderful job sometimes the greatest poem comes from nowhere. Jeanna "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls." ~Voltaire~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful Meredith! This contained a sense of urgency that came across beautifully ... very nicely done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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