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I would (for Sunny1's "Would You?")
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I would (for Sunny1's "Would You?") |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven 
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I Would (for sunny1's would you) I would wander I would dance I would reach out And take the chance I would run I would lay I would touch And brush your fears away I would warm I would stay I would hold you And kiss your breath away I would wish I would sing I would desire And fill that need I would speak I would show I would please And love you so < !signature--> Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". [This message has been edited by Prometheus (edited 08-09-2000).] |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
this is smooth....this is a charmer for sure! very good...and Sunny1 should be impressed, i know i am! ~Dawn whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Smartly said... Well put... regards to you Jamie, Sudhir |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hello Jamie... Yes, I am totally impressed, and out of breath. Jamie, you have such a way of putting beauty and love into every word you write! Thank you so much for this reply.... I treasure it! I have only one goal in life.. It Is: To have more than one goal in Life!! ~ ~ by Sunny ~ ~ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I had the beauty of your poem to inspire it Sunny1,--- I suppose I should include a note saying to read Would You before reading this one  jamie |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
i gotta find would you, but this is absoulutly beautiful, very nicely put...would love to read more ofcourse  salooma |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Jamie...I keep re-reading your poem and I do believe that this is now a matched set......your part completed the original, and I don't think I want to read one without the other. At some point maybe they could be posted together..... Anytime you want to add to my poems, my friend, please... please do so!! This is wonderful!! I have only one goal in life.. It Is: To have more than one goal in Life!! ~ ~ by Sunny ~ ~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Matched set it is .... a wonderful follow up you have brought....easy flow with the smoothness of yearnings... Wonderful write. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
sorry about the double post but hey it is worth it anyway is it not? [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-09-2000).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Jamie, WOW between you and Sunny, you have me in tears, this is a beautiful response to Sunny's "Would You" Lucky girl that gets you my friend definately a matched set |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is such a beautiful reply to Sunny's poem! You too seem to be in sync poetically!  |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
Jamie Marvelous - Marvelous - Marvelous. I am totally impressed. Absolutely lovely reply to Sunny 1. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Isn't it too much fun, Jamie, when one finds another wordmate? Good stuff here... |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
absolutely..a perfect pair. Excellent writing on both parts.... |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Gee-- I am overwhelmed.  Thanks everyone, you are all so wonderful. And S1 feel free to use this anyway your please, it is your words after all... i simply used them |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Your words do please. This is so tender and fits so well with the other. What a charmer you are indeed..lol......Reading them together will be perfect completness. Jenn E |
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