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While You Sleep, Love
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While You Sleep, Love |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
I didn't want to say good-bye, so I'm leaving while you sleep. A picture of us and the memories are the only things I'll keep. In the morning, when you awake, and there is no one next to you. I hope you will realize that I did what I had to do. Lost in peaceful dreams, I place a kiss upon your brow. I will never let you go if I don't leave this room right now. You've been a part of me so long and the only lover that I've known. To imagine you with another simply cuts me to the bone. Would we have been as happy, if we knew the end before. I do not doubt you love me, but I know that you love her more. I heard you whisper in the phone and tears your eyes did blur. There was sadness when you said... "I don't know how to tell her." Maybe,had I not heard, I could have continued the game. But how can I hold you back knowing you don't feel the same. In order to spare my feelings, you were loving two at a time. But there are times when it is better to be cruel than to be kind. So while you sleep, I'll leave, Love, and I'll quickly walk away. And in the morning when you awake, you'll arise to a brand new day. --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oh my TA,...this is crawling around inside of me now. While you sleep is so soft and gentle and then the rest just stings. Very expressive of you. Great writing. Take care please. *Peace. |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
You've captured the story of my first love. First love... love... what a funny thought now, 16 years later. I was just a child. What the hell was I thinking? But it hurt like hell then. Great job!!! You brought back some long ago forgot memories... I think I'll go stab my yearbook!!! -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
This isn't what I thought the poem was going to be about. How very sad, Tennessee Angel. Loving yet painful. Elizabeth Why ME??? |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
The pain is very evident here Angel. . . sometimes, we need to make that choice. . . no matter how much it hurts. . . Simply wonderful. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
This brought tears to my eyes - for I've been in the same shoes once before in my life - I don't remember being as kind with my thoughts - but I left quietly all the same. you've expressed this beautifully |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Angel Very expressive. Very emotional. Your words I could actually picture. Love him enough to leave him. Shows strength in the midst of quite a bit of pain. Garfield |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
wow. this made me cry. i have done this. this is me. you have touched my heart with this. please emial me. great work. Once upon a time there was a light in my life, now theres only love in the dark, There's nothing I can do, a total eclipse of the heart. |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Thank you all for your kind replies. This wasn't what I had intended for this piece when I started, but as I wrote the words took on a life of their own. I'm glad that you all enjoyed it. Thanks!!  < !signature-->--You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- [This message has been edited by Tennessee Angel (edited 08-19-2000).] |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
Tennessee Angel What beautiful words: "I heard you whisper in the phone and tears your eyes did blur. There was sadness when you said... "I don't know how to tell her" I could feel the sadness and pain. I am sure that there are many people who have been there and heard something similar - great poem - well written. didi |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
TA* Your work always touches my heart...this one simply sang...selfless love. Beautifully woven~ |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Deeply painful...it hurts so much to let go sometimes...absolutely heart wrenching and beautiful work. *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
You express such love, pain , and strength with this, and you do it so well! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
heart wrenching... painful... sorrowful... well, parting is never fun... an excellent poem here, tennessee... regards, sudhir |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Such strength gained from the terrible pain. This is indeed wonderful writing! |
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