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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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Mark's Challenge Offering for verse #1 A vagrant me stood by the riverside, Picking pebbles to kill plentiful time, Picked one, and then picked another Until they were many doing a mime. I chose a pebble, a circular one ~ A flick of my wrist, I let it slide Let it swim past the riverbank And reach out to the other side. And it cut through a tender green stem Of a young white lily, fully in bloom, A painful howl, I heard a lover wail And eyes met a toad, shadowed in gloom. To my innocent look, added the shame, Lost and drowning, all in suddenness, Offering an innocuous excuse, so lame, Horses of guilt trampled nature's finesse. As if in reaction, my palms moved apart Dropping pebbles of time, thus collected, All dropping down in the beating of a heart Taking with them past moments recollected. Now, I sit by the riverside woebegone Soaking up yesterday's haunt, spiritless Knowing, if and when have come and gone And gone is here to taunt, dry and witless. --- [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-16-2000).] |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Suhir, that was absolutely wonderful! Such imagery is to be envied  stay cool  ~~Lavada~~ "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart somewhere to receive it".--Ivan Panin |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Horse of guilt trampled nature's finesse... oh, the imagery! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
lavada (err sweetcoll...) Thanks a lot for the envy that you hold...  Karilea, Oh! the response... so much said ... Thanks My regards, sudhir |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
OOOHHH my Godddddd...Sudhir--your imagery is so perfect and you know how I love imagery as you have read my prose.....This is so beautiful and you have blown the records to shame with your outstanding efforts.....I am so truley honored. Thank you so much and well need I say....the gold medal for sure. Now up to the podium to hear your anthem and receive your award..... |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Sudhir, you can call me Lavada if you want..everyone else does! And yes, I wish I had imagery like that  stay cool ~~Lavada~~ "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart some |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Mark, You are way too lavish with your words of praise... Thanks and lavada, thanks for the privilege... and you can call me sudhir (omg  you already do... he he )regards, sudhir |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
LOL, Sudhir Lyer, I guess I could call you Mr. Lyer, but here in this place, it seems to formal.. Anyway, you're cool...Keep it up ans stay cool Lavada "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart some |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Sudhir wow challenge excellently met. wonderful poem. "Beyond all this good is the terror,The grip of a mercenary hand,When savagery turns all good reason, There's no turning back, no last stand,"I.Curtis |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Hi Sudir, I read this and I am in awe at the elegance you portray in your writings. Lovely poem Coco |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sudhir, I bow to your finesse with the pen, tis indeed mightier than the sword. Challenge well met and surpassed. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hello Sudhir...Wonderful writing you have done, as always. Glad I came by for a read. I do enjoy your writings. |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
Oh Dear Sir - your poem is just wonderful. I could feel my hands open and drop the pepples. I am glad I came by. didi |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir- I am awe struck by your poem and the the imagery and just the wonderful way you wrote it and what you said...great job sir...I must call you sir, since you are getting a medal. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
brian, thanks a lot your support seems to be such a trusted fixture that I feel strange peace just noting that you have read this one...coco, and I am here in awe of the your lovely response, thanks Kethry, Thanks a great deal for coming by and ah, with lovely words of praise... thanks Bill, Thanks a lot for making it known that you like the way I write, that pleases me immensely... didi, I am glad your could feel with the poem's flow... thanks Martie, if you are awe struck by what I wrote here, I am star struck by all that you have written... Thanks Regards, sudhir |
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