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The Sound Of Icy Echoes
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The Sound Of Icy Echoes |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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The sound of icy echoes Rests within her eyes Upon a wave of emptiness A spirit slowly dies. Torn by a bitter past Abandoned by her dreams Hopelessness approaches fast Upon the grey mooonbeams. Hollow lays her mind Blank as the muted clouds Apparitions whisper unkind The words a bitter shroud. With a single solemn glance She slowly turns her back Shutting out the dance Never finding what she lacks. *Krista Knutson* "Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~ |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
This is a dark poem.. Too bad turning away and blocking out the pain can become too easy. Excellent poem, my friend, as always.  A writer's soul is on paper etched. In flames I shall not be consumed, but reborn. -- Abrahm Simons |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wow..this is beautiful...excellent imagery and it has this lovely, mystic, loneliness-- quality about it...very well written... and it uses all my favorite poetic words... whisper...echo...solemn... some words were meant for poetry..(smile) take care, janet marie< !signature--> ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. your my inspiration, your my fire... your words fill me with poetic desire. Every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. Janet Marie *I miss you baby... I love you, always.* [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 02-22-2000).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Exactly right. Your word selection is excellent. Great job, Krista! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Great flow! I like this very much! <*\\\>< There's only two ways you can go... One way you can save your riches, And the other will save your soul. Rich Mullins |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is beautifully written and heart breaking, Krista. I especially liked the last two lines. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Krista~ This is just an astonishing piece of work. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Alwye~ as this is dark, it is beautiful. You paint a vivid picture.-SEA |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Ouch. Feels like somebody's been looking into MY mirror...wow. just found another piece of myself. Thanks. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
You know, I can't believe some of the images you bring to mind. You poetry reads like pure passion coursing through my veins. I relate to everything in this. unfortunately, daring to dance often never shows us what it is we lack either. My every compassion, Alwye. Beautiful poem. michael |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wonderful!!! excellent work, Alwye. 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you all so much. I'm honored that you all liked it. Michael- I'm glad I was able to touch you. Sometimes the words live in you and when they emerge, it's stunning how accurate they can be. Thank you for the wonderful comments. *Krista Knutson* "Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~ |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Nicely done. Enjoyed. |
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