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The Dance (from Open #2)
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The Dance (from Open #2) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648
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The gray plump granny smoothes her hair And her pale pink cotton gown And drifts away - to another day ....To another time and town. How many years now has it been How many tears ago When her eyes fell first upon that lad ....Who had set her heart aglow? She dabs the teardrops falling fast And lays her glasses down And travels there - to those days so fair ....In another time and town. She now beholds that vision clear A brilliant budding spring With a promise of 'forevermore' ....And a glist'ning golden ring. It's countless tears now since he's gone Yet not a sun goes down But she's proudly dancing with him there ....In her satin wedding gown. Her lonely days...at last...are done True...she leaves this land of care And she runs to him and takes the hand ....Of her lad so debonair. Now at last they are together True...all trouble's now laid down And now they're dancing there quite grandly ....In that grand 'forever town'. Yes, together now...forever True...they're walking hand in hand And 'midst the angels they're still dancing ....In that grand 'forever land'. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Oh Denise, this one is so beautiful. Great imagery. Thanks for reposting this one.  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Why, thank you Eloise! I'm glad that it touched someone! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Denise....this is breathtakingly beautiful Oh, such words about everlasting love. This one needs a boost back up my friend, it's too good to miss |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Denise, I'm so glad I saw this! It's a beautiful poem, so sweet in sentiment and your rhyme and meter give it such a "feeling" of fluidity...just like their dance, one might imagine. So nice... Claire |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Ohhhhh...so lovely, and tenderly sad. Hey - missed ya! K'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Denise, this is very, very ....oh, the words are always the same, wonderful, great...I wish I could find another better word. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you, Ruth, Claire, Kamla and Martie for reading and commenting! I'm so glad that you enjoyed it! Denise (I am still having intermittent 'puter problems and am having trouble reading and replying but I'll do so when I am able.  ) |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
How beautiful! Corinne |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you, Corinne! I'm glad you thought it beautiful! Denise |
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