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spiked
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0 posted 2000-02-14 12:44 PM


The passions pass
As the days go by.
The fires flash
And then they die.

You lit the fire
To start the burn
Then lie in wait
As I twist and turn.

The heat of love
Has fried my soul.
Taken my pride
Taken it’s toll.

So sit not back
And watch & wait.
As I suffer so
To pass this gate.

This gate of pain
Is where I sit.
This gate of pain
Which causes fits.

To heal this pain
Is what I must do.
Be it moving forward
Without you.

So look real deep
For it stands before you
The time has come
I have no more to
Give you free



© Copyright 2000 Richard Rendall - All Rights Reserved
Enola
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1 posted 2000-02-14 05:28 AM


   Wow - I've felt the same recently and you've described this so much better than I ever could.  The day I get that good, is the day that pigs fly.
silvershaddow
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2 posted 2000-02-14 06:42 AM


A great poem wish describes pain perfectly. Well Done.
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3 posted 2000-02-14 07:26 AM


~*HUGS*~
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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spiked
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4 posted 2000-02-14 09:35 AM


Thank you very much for your kind words as they are very much appreciated. Give yourself more crdit Enola writing comes from inside. just need to find the right words.
Thank you silvershadow and **HUGS** to you Marge  

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2000-02-14 09:56 AM


Ouch.  I am sorry, spiked.  I didn't think it
could possibly hurt anymore than it already
did.  Today just amplifies it all, I guess.
Know that you are in my thoughts today...
As you well know, I know how you feel, and
you said it, perfectly.  Well done.

spiked
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Hammond, La USA
6 posted 2000-02-15 01:13 AM


thanks serenity doesn't hurt to have someone on your side.
Rich

CMGrimm
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7 posted 2000-02-15 01:18 AM


Ahh...now I see the darker more painful side.  Well written, well layed out...but very painful.  I realize I can't possibly know what it is you are struggling with, but always remember there are brighter days ahead and you have many here who can only hope and pray for you.

Chris

spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
8 posted 2000-02-15 01:24 AM


thanks Chris
Love is not always an easy course. Some things require work and or pain to survive.
Appreciate the support.
Rich

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