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bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
The Pieces of MY Heart I have a little story to tell, I know just where to start. It's not a very long one, It begins within my heart. It was all in pieces, Lying scattered on the floor, I knew I had to pick them up, And replace them as before. But, I couldn't bring myself to do it, Because they never seemed to fit. There were always pieces missing, Never sure quite where they went. So, I started searching, For the pieces left behind. Then I started crying, For the ones I couldn't find. As I searched alone you see, For the pieces I held dear, I tried to call for help, But, I guess no one could hear. No one close enough to my heart, To see the pieces fall. I kept it hidden far from sight, Blocked, behind a wall. Then my wall began to crumble, One brick at a time. And standing on the other side, Was the reason for this rhyme. He didn't tell me who he was, He just opened up his hand. He said, "I found these on the beach, scattered in the sand." I stared in disbelief, At the pieces of my heart. He said,"We'll put them all together, and you'll have a brand new start." Now, my my heart is mended, The pieces all in place. And I'd like to thank him kindly, For this smile upon my face. |
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Wobbly Head Bob Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 299Virginia, USA |
*Applauding* Very nicely done, the scheme works excellently here, and the flow was superb! A very happy story of the mended heart, a lovely read, thanks! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BestGirl~ Welcome to Passions ... and with this passionate piece you are welcomed into the family ! I think you will enjoy this piece I posted back in Open #6 ... just click on it. How ironic as you will see .... /pip/Forum31/HTML/000549.html ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Welcome to Passions, Bestgirl! Lovely poem! Please check your email for a special welcome! Denise |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
A very sweet, pretty first post. Welcome! To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
this is very cool  i love it much..and written so well  welcome to passions! hugs, dg she doesnt want the kind of love she can live with--she wants the kind she cant live without -clint black |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
"He just opened up his hand. He said, "I found these on the beach, scattered in the sand." I stared in disbelief, At the pieces of my heart. He said,"We'll put them all together, and you'll have a brand new start."" I love the way you put this together. Sometimes you have to let go and move on, But never let go of the memories. |
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Brenda Hall Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 88Texas,USA |
Hi! Poem was so beautiful,but somewhat sad! There is always a new beginning! GBU!  Brenda H. |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Welcome! I really loved your poem. beautiful flow and wonderfuly romantic! Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
Very nice first post. Welcome to passions, I know you will find friends in the Pub... Alicia |
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bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
Thank you for the warm welcome and also for taking the time to comment. This is really the first time I've ever got feedback from people other than friends and family!! It was wonderful ...thanks again. bestgirl |
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Stephanos
since 2000-07-31
Posts 3618Statesboro, GA, USA |
Loved this poem! By the way, who is this one who came to you to put the pieces of your life back together? Hope you don't mind me asking. I just had a similar experience in my own life and was wondering if perhaps it was who I think it is. Keep up the good work. Look forward to more of your poems. |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Here is your poem that you were looking for, Bstgirl. At the top of each forum you will see an option to select...Show topics for the last day, 5 days, etc., all the way up to show all topics.....that will help you find postings for as far back as you want to go! Denise |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I'm bringing this back up for you in case you missed it, Bestgirl. Denise |
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bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
Denise, Thank you so much for being so helpful....This was my first post and I promise I will do better next time..lol. Thanks for the patience. Ranea |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
Best girl, this is such a sweet first poem to post, I really enjoyed it! Welcome to Passions, you'll be glad you came! |
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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
A wonderful read for a lonely Saturday morning. Such a super flow of words with a very nice story and concept. Hope to see more of your fine words soon. -Lady |
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bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
Debbie~ I am already so glad I came! Thank you! Lady~ Thank you so much! I am glad that you enjoyed it. Thank you both for the kind words. Best |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
Wow...this is REALLY well done!! I like it!! --Little Girl |
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bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
Thank you so much little girl, This one was truly from the heart. It's nice to know it's being enjoyed. Best |
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kid D Member
since 2000-10-18
Posts 64 |
this is great...love the ending well love it all...sigh...funny how the right person can make it all better |
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bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
Thank you KD for the nice comments... Best |
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