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A very silly boy Junior Member
since 2000-02-23
Posts 16 |
"I love you still, still, still....." These words haunt me, taunt me, rattling their hollow echos through my empty grief-wracked shell. More words come and go racing through my mind rending my soul like no knife ever could. And though it's too late the pain in my heart and the tears on my cheek betray the tragic truth that yes, I love you still. |
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
it i srare i respond to a love poem (mainly 'cause the plethora of them gets mind-numbing) but i'll have to say that i really enjoyed this one, you have a good style rich-pa |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hi..welcome to passions and the Pub...nice to have you here...this is veery well and passionatly expressed...and how well I relate to it. nice work. take care, janet marie ...there are places inside all our souls... that have never been touched... there are places inside our hearts... that need to be loved this much... Janet Marie *I miss you baby... I love you, always.* |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yes, welcome to the Pub! Wonderful poem! Denise |
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Sasikat Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 290St. Petersburg, FL |
Welcome to The Pub. Very nice, I sure can relate well.  |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Welcome to the Pub (my fave place on Passions!). What a sad way to make an entrance, but welcome anyways. I hope your suffering ends soon, write some tragic poetry, that always helps! LOL Great poem by the way  ~X~ Vivian Greene ~It is not our circumstances that create our discontent or contentment. It is us.~ |
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A very silly boy Junior Member
since 2000-02-23
Posts 16 |
Thankyou all very much for your warm welcome to the pub and thanks for the generous comments too. It's nice to see that the locals are such a friendly bunch As far as the style and passion go, they come from within. When I write seriously, my heart and soul flow. maybe that's a bit of a cliche, but it's very rare that I edit any of my poems. X Angel, thankyou for giving me the prod to write something again and thanks for your kind wishes. The trouble with us humans, however, is that we sometimes do some really dumb things that bring suffering on ourselves and then we have to live with that forever  |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
"These words haunt me, taunt me, rattling their hollow echos through my empty grief-wracked shell." Wow! Very powerful words here. They complement each other so well through the whole poem. Joy |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Great job with this, silly! I agree, it's potent stuff...I hope to see more of your work! And welcome to the Pub!  Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
I like this a lot ! And welcome to the pub |
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Stephen Jones Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 53 |
Wow! That's very descriptive of loving on a one-way street! Great poem. Word choice was very tasteful and vivid. Are you new here? Me too! Welcome. |
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A very silly boy Junior Member
since 2000-02-23
Posts 16 |
Wow, thanks everyone for such a warm welcome . I'm glad you all liked the poem too, sad though it is. At least something good has come out of my pain. |
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William P Bussey Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 188 |
Welcome to a very nice forum, you sound very young, but to me isn't every body? A good job and life does get better. Bill |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Such a sad poem. I read great loss in this poem. Good job with expressing it. |
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Sheilan Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 50Snohomish, WA |
You have a gift most definately...able to transport any reader that has loved and lost to the cutting moment...I hope to read more from you soon! Sheilan |
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