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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... 
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Ship Wreck Water is calmer now after the violence of the storm. Surface like glass forever, any direction the wind once again safe and warm. Sharks seem to be full at last they went away sometime around dawn. This lifeboat seems so tiny in all this gigantic everyone and everything else is gone. Emptiness like the panic of the night is overwhelming, threatens to rip the screams. Voice creaks and breaks, can't handle much more inventory leaves just maybes and a few dreams. Survived, and now what is wondered between the hunger, sharks, sun and sea. Future is looking bright enough to terrify only a prayer is left for me. bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Sometimes we do feel adrift, don't we? This is excellent writing, Daniel! Denise |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Wow powerful emotions, bleeding! How do u manage to do that? heh i'm so JEALOUS! votevotevote... *S* love, michelle If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
I like your style here Bleeding,puts me in mind of Ginsberge.......Yea I like it a lot. Regards Jon |
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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
bleeding, I am quickly becoming a fan of yours, that last line is a show stopper and a knock out. Thanks for the wonderful read. Lady Nogs |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Wow, bleeding, I love this one.. transition from the storm, to the calm, and the WRECK after it, describing many situations in life.. well.. certainly no writers block here! This is, perhaps, one of my favourites Daniel.. ^_^ Luv, Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu (Please e-mail me at yu_lan_wen_@hotmail.com instead of the e- |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Dan, Really terrific poetry here. Look out bro, while on that calm sea! |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
lol yes Denise...being adrift isn't as much fun as being marooned! Michelle...natural as breathin after all these years! Jon...Ginsberg? whatta Beserkly kinda thang! Ms Nogs...a fan? oh my! Lynne... a keeper, eh? Sis Marcy, it's the calm that gets ya! Appreciate y'all taking the time to comment. Decided to quit bucking the system and name names...although i will most likely rebel again...it's in my blood here i go again... bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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