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Deverone Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 136San Antonio, Tx, USA |
A child quietly sobbing huddled low in the corner. Hating his life wishing it all away. Closing off all contact no one to help or defend him. He tries to forget the laughter and the smiles. The faces burned deep into his conscience. He wants them to feel the pain and torment. As time begins to pass he blocks it and forgets. He stand and cleans up dusting himself off drying his eyes. He steps outside and accepts the beatings. He begins to believe it was right. I watch him walk away slowly and indignant and I realize.... I am remembering. ------------------ Deverone |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Horrible thing for a child to endure much less alone.Well done verse. ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Deverone Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 136San Antonio, Tx, USA |
This is probly one of the most painful pieces I've written and there was virtually little notice. Thank you for the comments Watcher666. Your words are appreciated. ------------------ Deverone "We are cups, constantly and quietly being filled. The trick is, knowing how to tip ourselves over and let the beautiful stuff out". ----Ray Bradbury--- |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Angst filled words here. As time begins to pass and blocks it and forgets. Such a tragic thing,but good to remember and then dispose of......waiting to read more of your work.  Jenny |
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suicidal dreams Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343Toledo Ohio USA |
Makes me remember my earlier childhood. Great poem i felt the pain of many from your words ------------------ life is short kill quick |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
Wow! I've never been able to write such a powerful poem, i'm envious! keep writing 'em because it's your gift! :0) ashley ------------------ If you love something let it go, if it comes back to you it's yours, if it doesnt then it never was" |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow! is right...Indeed a powerful piece, Deveron. I have suffered flashbacks from what I once thougt an uneventful past. A truly horrific experience...very well done. ------------------ Michael Anderson Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream? |
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Deverone Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 136San Antonio, Tx, USA |
Thank you everyone. Please don't think that I was tooting a horn......but I have read a lot of good pieces by other people that get pushed to the back real fast because some people are so quick to post their works without reading others........I've been trying to read first then post ...if I want to post anything at that time.....trying to keep giving encouragement to others for their wonderful works also. Like I said please don't get me wrong. ------------------ Deverone "We are cups, constantly and quietly being filled. The trick is, knowing how to tip ourselves over and let the beautiful stuff out". ----Ray Bradbury--- |
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wolfie97 Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 58Newcastle, WY USA |
WOW! That really hit close to home. Very good! This one will definately stay with me. Hard, emotionally to read for me, it was very well done. ------------------ Garrett 'sneaky' Gall |
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Arcane Chaos New Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 6Coral Springs, FL, Broward |
Powerful poem, hits me dead on, gets my blood boiling just reading it. |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Very powerful words here Deverone. Good job. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Blue Eyed Wanderer Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 84Rhode Island, US |
Wow. I loved this...it was so great! You can't describe me any better than that! I've been there, forgotten about it, and still dealing with the flashbacks. Thanks for sharing this! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Such a heartbreak. This is an excellent piece on the subject of child abuse. I'm sorry that it is your story. Denise |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
That hit hard.. Very, very powerful. I hope to see more of your work as I wander through the pub.. MAY THE ROAD RISE TO MEET YOU, MAY THE WIND BE ALWAYS AT YOUR BACK MAY THE SUN SHINE UPON YOUR FACE THE RAINS FALL SOFT UPON YOUR FIELDS AND, UNTIL WE MEET AGAIN, MAY GOD HOLD YOU IN THE PALM OF HIS HAND Irish Blessing |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
Like the others,i to was hit hard by this poem......sometimes things from our childhood comes to haunt us when we wish to forget,but somethings just can't be forgotten.Thank you for putting my feelings into words =] swamp And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Wow....this is beautiful. So tragic... Thanks for sharing it with us. Love and hugs, Lizzie. "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Powerful, indeed, Deverone ... Too true, for too many .... Wonderfully stated .... "This is where you will win the battle .... in the playhouse of your mind." Maxwell Maltz |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
hey, this is an awful poem, deverone.. I don't mean the poem itself is awful.. just .. that it needed to be written at all.. a sad, very well written poem.. my compliments to you on your talent. ^_^ Lynne |
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Deverone Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 136San Antonio, Tx, USA |
Thank you everyone for all of your words of encouragement. I am truly greatful for having found a place such as this to express emotions and feeelings that are very personal and somewhat private in nature. Thank you again for the pleasure in knowing that the words written in the poems I have put up are understood and taken in the heart of you all. I am also thankful to be able to read your feelings and thoughts put into your own words and that you entrust this site to help you express those things that are held close in your heart and mind. Deverone "We are cups, constantly and quietly being filled. The trick is, knowing how to tip ourselves over and let the beautiful stuff out". ----Ray Bradbury--- |
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