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Craving a Kiss |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
CRAVING A KISS The moon shines above us and not a word is spoken. The silence is broken by a cough coming from you. I can't help but to think about how great your kiss would be. I've been waiting for this moment since the first time I met you. I'm now here. We are here, and I wounder if it will happen. Will our lips embrace in a romantic kiss? Or will we both pass up this opportunity we have? I lean forward, close to your face. You know what I want. We are both here alone in the darkness. No one would ever know. I wouldn't ever tell. Secrets we will make and secrets we will keep. Only the moon and stars would know of our actions. I want you, more than ever. I want to hold you so long. I never want to let you go. You know I would not be satisfied with just one kiss. You know I would want more than a simple kiss. Well, we are here, and we are together. This alone is good enough for me. Better than nothing, or so I believe. But when I started to speak, you put your hand on my face and gently kissed my lips. I was speechless! ------------------ "I Believe we are divine by nature." -Jewel Grace is the refinement of a soul over time. -Jewel |
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StratMatt Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 87Macomb, IL, U.S.A. |
I enjoyed this poem a lot. It's a very romantic type poem, especially with the naturistic aspects of it. The structure of the stanzas is kinda of odd, and had I been the author, I would probably structure them in more standard stanzas, but that's just comments from me. the Structure doesn't lessen the poem, just makes it different. Nice work. -Matt ------------------ "Lost time is never found again." -Ben Franklin. |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
Matt.....Thanx for the comments. I realize the structure is quite "odd", but if you notice, I seperated them as thoughts. Each seperations begins a new thought, and I thought it would be "different" to do it this way...Besides, different can be "good". ------------------ "I Believe we are divine by nature." -Jewel Grace is the refinement of a soul over time. -Jewel |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
I really enjoyed this poem. I only like romantic and love poems if they strike me right, and this one did.  Good work!------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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StratMatt Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 87Macomb, IL, U.S.A. |
I see what you mean about them being separate thoughts now. But also, like I said before, it was just different, not bad different, just different. Again, good work |
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Silent Silver Junior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 12AZ, USA |
What an excellent poem! Being with someone you love and wanting a kiss from them is such a great feeling. And then once you do, well, you know that feeling! Beautiful expression of that first time! -SS |
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