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Open Poetry #3

Wiping up the night

The Jackal
Member

since 1999-08-13

Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 1999-10-12 02:20 AM

i wipe up the night
the messes of frenzies
carrying me to distance
untold..unknown
where i have the good life
so special like you
underneath twilight's blues
never a lonely day
or a sudden night ray
to whisk me away
im so high
so far in love
the mud..the gravel
the pain.. the pity
wait.. duck now
reality just missed me..

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Saxoness

Senior Member

since 1999-07-18

Posts 1102
Texas

1 posted 1999-10-12 02:45 AM

I love the last two lines! Wonderful!

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot

Dragoness
Senior Member

since 1999-08-07

Posts 513

2 posted 1999-10-12 07:00 AM

Like this one much!

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Magic...the art of illusion....poetry....the art of the heart

mia
Member

since 1999-07-06

Posts 118

3 posted 1999-10-17 06:20 PM

I agree with Saxoness, I really like the two last lines... Great poem...
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