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Augchic711 Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 80O'Fallon, IL, USA |
The gentle kiss as we say good-bye Could stay etched in my mind forever You say it's not me that caused our problems Just merely changing times I question your initial motives for our relationship beginning Question if your feelings were ever true But fact is as much as I can question our relationsip the pain will never end. Can you honestly ever tell me that it wasn't something that I did that caused our glorius bliss to end! The gentle kiss as we say good-bye Was merely just a dream! Our relationship wasn't ever glorious nor blissful frankly it wasn't the wonderful illusion I built up in my mind. It wasn't a blissful romance. It was just a mere ILLUSION! |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Sometimes illusion soothes the soul. Wonderful piece. ------------------ Patience is a virtue, but virtue has never been one of my redeeming qualities. |
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Nothing could be truer to life than this poem. We always look at things the way we would like them to be and not necessarily the way they are. Reality is for people who can't face fantasy! You said it very well. Thanks for sharing. |
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Moonlight Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 105Auburn, Alabama USA |
I identify with the speaker in this poem. Very nice! ~m~ ------------------ www.auburn.edu/~fergum1 ~*Only when it is dark enough can you see the stars*~ |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
The truth of the matter is that Love is blind. When in love we make a concious or maybe a subconcious decision to overlook all the bad qualities in a person. The one thing that we most fail to do is when the time finally comes that the bad overshadows the good, do we still love that person no matter what or pack our bags and leave? (that is my little insight for the day) Good poem. Content is good, structure seems a little bit shaky to me. Yet it is still a good poem. Keep up the great work. JFreak |
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Augchic711 Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 80O'Fallon, IL, USA |
Thank you to all of the other poets that replied to this piece. I wrote it about a week ago about the current break up. I had 5 minutes before I could clock in and I was a bit upset, I'm glad that I am not the only one who feels this way about love. Thank you all for your comments. Good luck to you all in your next work! *******Augchic711******* |
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