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Old Cop |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
It’s 3:00 A.M., my thirteenth call A place called Crazy Joe’s Pool Hall A fight, a knife, a man is down It happens in this part of town My backup’s comin’ from the jail Was bookin’ in a drunk female And me, I’m riding all alone When I arrive I’m on my own I’m fairly close, about a mile If I was smart I’d stall awhile But as I always do with fights I come in quiet - cut the lights A crowd is huddled round the door Near all of them I’ve popped before Ain’t one of them cares much for me Most hopin’ I’ll go down, you see I open up the door a crack Some wanted guys run out the back I see the young dude lying there With blood just pourin’ from his hair I kneel beside him –find he’s dead Just then a pool cue cracked my head Fell in the blood to my alarm The second blow breaks my left arm The pool hall turns from red to black I struggle to get off my back Can’t count ‘em all, my vision’s blurred What’s happening? My thoughts are slurred I manage to get on my knees I try to focus – then I freeze I see now that there’s only one The problem is he’s got my gun He shoves the gun inside his belt Then grabs the cue with which he dealt The blows that brought me to the ground And swings again, a swooshing sound He misses and I’m on my feet I’m backing up, the wall I meet He’s pointing at me with a grin My arm bone’s stickin’ through the skin He’s reckless now - he comes too near So big and drunk he has no fear The years have slowed my uppercut The first one catches in his gut There’s vomit drippin’ from his chin He comes for me, I swing again This time I feel him lift a bit My shoulder’s wet with bloody spit I kick his knee and hear it snap He crumbles, reaches for his lap But I reach too, this time I won I manage to retrieve my gun He dares me shoot and tries to stand I say I will and call his hand I guess he sees it in my eyes And knows I’ll kill him if he tries I put my back against the wall And hear my backup’s siren call A minute and he’s through the door By then we both are on the floor The judge he gives him eighty years The dude looks back at me and sneers “I’ll kill you cop, when I get out I’ll hunt you down, you have no doubt.” I tell him, “Son, I’ll try to wait But I don’t think that it’s my fate When you get out - to be alive I’ve been a cop since sixty-five” sandman |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wonderful epic poem! I could almost smell the stale beer...hear the R&B on the jukebox....great poem Fred! Is this from your real life? |
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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
Well, first off, I must say that I looked for a great poem to bring to the top of the forum, as per Poet deVine and Nan's suggestion. I found this one!!!! I love it. Because I am interested in a law enforcement career, I really found it wonderful to read. Besides that, it was so well done!! Wonderfully written, brilliant, in fact! Keep up the good work... keep posting... I would love to read more. ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Krystal, I'm very glad you chose this poem to bring "to the top of the heap"... Fred is a truly awesome poet... Forgive me Fred, but these folks simply MUST read more of your work... Guys - Go to Fred's page on the "Passions in Poetry" site - http://netpoets.com/authors/0157000.htm - Take a few minutes to read his work - You'll be Hobblin' back for more...  |
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Ron
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US |
Nan's right (she usually is), so let's make it a little easier... Fred's Page [This message has been edited by Ron (edited 06-25-99).] |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Thanks to you all for the encouragement. Makes me want to write more... fh |
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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
PLEASE DO!!! I love what you have written so far... you are truly talented. ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Oh, Fred, dear Fred, what can I say? your talent blows me clean away. Two heroes that I do enjoy Are Fred Hobbs and his brother Roy. |
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Mr_Squint Junior Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 17Bankstown, New South Wales, Australia |
I'd like to reply if I may That I've had an extraordinary day 'Cause Fredd's poem has came my way There is no more that I can say Except for a humble "Yay!" ------------------ A mailman was mailing mailmen to other mailmen so these mailmen could mail these mailmen in a mail truck that didn't mail mail but mailed men!!! - Mr_Squint |
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ac Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 129Cayey, PR - USA |
This is great Fred...you managed to create a very vivid image of every detail...the scene still linger in mind... I'll be waiting for the sequel... |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
back to the top with this great poem (and i swear, it's not solely because i adore men in uniform)  ------------------ Childhood Memories...your countenance...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J... serving wench...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart... |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Thanks Elvira, You really had to dig deep to find this one. I appreciate that you did and I appreciate the comments. sandman |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Had me in suspense all the way through, wonderfully written. |
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Delores Hall Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 342USA |
All I can say is you are good. |
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blueloon Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161NY |
I will agree with elvira, "I love men in uniform," and as far as this poem goes...BRAVO! I am so glad that I had the opportunity to read it. One of the greatest that I have read in awhile. thank you... blueloon |
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