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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Seeing her sleeping, Walt got out of bed. He knew she was cheating on him anew. The lover meant nothing, that's what she said. Elisa was unaware that he knew. It was the letter he found that damned her. The letter spoke of a forbidden love. When Walt found it, madness began to stir. The answer hit like a bolt from above. He laid his sharpest blade against her throat. Whispering softly, Walt said, "Elisa?" With smiling face, he says, "I read the note." Slicing with the knife, he bends to kiss her. Poor Walt, for killing his wife on a whim. He didn't know it was written for him. ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Dream, as you know, I truly love this piece! I just wish the ending didn't sink in my heart! ------------------ ~onevoice~ "I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart." |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
How frightful, and sad, yet very moving. |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
This is well written but so warped. I beg you to apply your obvious talent to the other side of the coin.... |
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Dragon Member
since 1999-07-14
Posts 138Highmount,NY ,USA |
WOW!Very Powerful! You have done it once again!! |
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quote99 Junior Member
since 1999-07-14
Posts 17US |
While well written, I find the subject disturbing. Your "mythical" type poetry is much better than this. You give the impression, since it's the woman who gets killed in your sonnets, that you do not respect women. This can't be true as you have also done a tribute to the women here. This is just my opinion. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Don't worry, the odds are that I will not write another, for this forum anyway. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
hey umm just wonderin but ummm yuh plannin killin my wife huh? |
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Sweet T Member
since 1999-06-14
Posts 64mesa, arizona maricopa |
Hey is it not funny how the human mind is quick to jump to conclusions. If we all would learn how to ask questions first then "kill" later the world would be a better place. lol........... The world without love grows cold.... |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Exactly the point of this piece! Someone notices it at least. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Ouch! Geez.... couldn't you have asked who that note was for? And all the while, she was hoping he didn't find the other one.... good grief ~~ Interesting piece, m'friend. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
By commission, Doreen. |
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Ominous Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 68Canada |
Such a great piece. So scary, yet it is that way because it is real, and it happens. ------------------ I am but a shadow, lost within this world of darkness |
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