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Critical Analysis #1

Death Of A Rose

jaxjoy
Member

since 1999-12-14

Posts 112
Texas

0 posted 1999-12-27 08:41 PM

Sometimes
The swirl of a brush stroke
can appear to be that of a rose
And YOU
whose petals
I can never touch
whose fragrance
I can never intoxicate myself with
Were my rose
The rose whose thorn
stays embedded in my heart
A constant reminder
of this pain and passion
My blood
as red as YOU
My Rose

Kenneth Ray Taylor
Member

since 1999-11-11

Posts 139
Duluth, Minnesota, USA

1 posted 1999-12-31 07:12 AM

A vivid and expressive piece. I particularly liked the beginning which compared the rose (true love) with the brush stroke feigning itself a rose (counterfeit love). My wife decorates cakes with frosting flowers. So I can easily visualize how a brush stroke becomes a rose--at least the image of a rose. I liked your comment in your profile too: "Hobbies: Getting my heart broke." I used to have the same hobby. Things will get better.

jaxjoy
Member

since 1999-12-14

Posts 112
Texas

2 posted 1999-12-31 12:58 PM

Thank you for your comment and words of encouragement.

Munda
Member Elite

since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

3 posted 1999-12-31 03:31 PM

I really like this...as a total, but especially the first four lines...every time I start reading your poem, my mind wanders off after the first 4 lines. : ) I guess I'm a dreamer. : ) Happy New Year !

Munda

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