The Dream That Ended Too Soon

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The Dream That Ended Too Soon

HCwildchild
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since 1999-09-03

Posts 55
Pennsylvania,USA

0 posted 1999-09-17 05:26 PM

Gradually dusk falls upon the land,
Engulfing the world in darkness.
No longer can you see the sun,
The midnight hour is upon us.
A cold wind sweeps down through the streets
Whilst I lie awake in bed,
And I must pull tight the sheets,
And rest my weary head.
Then I slowly close my eyes,
And dream of you and me.
The stars soon cover the night sky,
They are the only light you can see.
And I am safe and warm inside,
When I'm dreaming of the things that could be.
Where there is nothing we can hide.
Then I see your handsome face
And we are in eachothers arms,
Feeling secure in our embrace,
Protected from all harm.
Then slowly the darkness fades away,
And light fills my quiet room.
What was night has turned into day.
My dream was over too soon.

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Heather C.

rachana.s
Member

since 1999-09-16

Posts 55
madras,tamil nadu,India

1 posted 1999-09-18 12:47 PM

hey that was great

rachi

HCwildchild
Member

since 1999-09-03

Posts 55
Pennsylvania,USA

2 posted 1999-09-18 11:08 AM

Thanx, I'm glad you liked it

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Heather C.

rachana.s
Member

since 1999-09-16

Posts 55
madras,tamil nadu,India

3 posted 1999-09-20 12:18 PM

heather,

"great" was a very simple word to use in the circumstances. I liked the description of the night and the poem quiet expressed the the way I feel when I miss my boyfriend.

that is why "great"

rachi

P.S. did you like my post? it is "this is me here"

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