An Aberration of Assonance in Kalamazoo?

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An Aberration of Assonance in Kalamazoo?

Romy
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since 2000-05-28

Posts 1170
Plantation, Florida

0 posted 2000-06-07 01:04 PM

Nan's workshop project- Is this Assonance?

Few knew that Sue grew
a slew of bamboo
in a large blue shoe,
on the steps of the zoo.

And when she was through
she mixed it with glue,
creating a stew
that smelled like a loo,

which she fed to a cow
who had started to moo,
when it leaned through the fence
seeking something to chew.

This story is true, but I haven’t a clue,
why the shrew
brewed the stew
in plain view of the zoo!

Do you?

Elyse
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since 2000-04-16

Posts 414
Apex (think raleigh) NC

1 posted 2000-06-07 03:56 PM

YAAAAAYYYYY! this is so cute! move over shel silverstein! make this longer, and you have a publishable children's book. think of the great illustrations it would have! BRAVO i say to you

luv Elyse

Romy
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since 2000-05-28

Posts 1170
Plantation, Florida

2 posted 2000-06-07 09:46 PM

Thanks Elyse for your kind comments! It was fun to write, I've never tried that style before!

jenni
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since 1999-09-11

Posts 478
Washington D.C.

3 posted 2000-06-07 10:58 PM

debbie--

Maybe the shrew
From Kalamazoo
Was feeling blue
(or some other hue);
Maybe, it's true,
She loved that stew,
But maybe she knew
Nothing better to do!

lol, this was fun, thanks for the smile!

jenni

Romy
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since 2000-05-28

Posts 1170
Plantation, Florida

4 posted 2000-06-08 10:04 AM

And...

Maybe a postman with postage due
on his way, with a bill to the zoo
stepped in the simmering, stinking stew
soaking his socks all the way through.

While high over head a big bird flew
and heard the cow who had started to moo
and dropped an egg in the smelly brew
(for want of anything better to do!)

Shocked and surprised, the shrew yelled Shoo!
and the postman called for a cleaning crew
as the mixture of egg, bamboo and glue
flooded the streets of Kalamazoo.

And then the problems really grew!
(Especially when a strong wind blew!)

Elyse
Member

since 2000-04-16

Posts 414
Apex (think raleigh) NC

5 posted 2000-06-08 05:38 PM

im tellin ya, find someone who can draw and publish you a book! so, so cute

much luv, Elyse

Romy
Senior Member

since 2000-05-28

Posts 1170
Plantation, Florida

6 posted 2000-06-08 06:24 PM

Thanks for the encouragement!

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