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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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Burnt Offerings Burnt offerings, the shadow sings. Ashes drift in the dark. One can’t control a wayward soul, So oft’ misses the mark. To await death, to count each breath; Contempt beheld a throne. A sorry way to pass the day, Etching your own headstone. The world, unfair, seek disrepair, Yes, let the demons feed. Sloth, wrath and pride all justified, You sanctify the deed. It hurts too bad—it drives you mad, The everything you’ve lost. But why stop now, yes disavow Loved ones who’ll pay the cost. Never move on, all hope withdrawn Believing yourself cursed. When loved found true must start where you Somehow love yourself first? Don’t even know why tears still flow, In light darkness still sings. Once soul divine, withers ‘the tine Of these burnt offerings. Michael Anderson |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Michael...My friend I believe between you and I we could burn the proverbial house down with our Burnt Offerings. Really enjoyed the depth of this and the inner rhymes you use so good. Thanks for sharing. My wife wanted to ask you what part of Ca. you live in if you care to share...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ Paul |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
lol, we might just take the whole city with us, Paul. I live in Bakersfield, CA...what some have appropriately deemed the armpit.  |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
deep poetry, the sadness prevails when reading poetry about lost souls, we have to remenber thanks yann |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Oh..Poet..You make me just want to cry.. & then feed you chicken-noodle soup. Passionate work Michael Sky~ Sometimes..Miracles are just good people |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Michael...Loved your reply to mine. Been to Bakersfield once when I worked in Port Hueneme back in 1984. Only went there with some friends to eat lunch. Spent 9 months in Oxnard and loved it. Something to do all the time for a small town Louisiana boy...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
yann, thank you for the read and the comment. i do my best to avoid writing about sad things these days but sometimes they still creep in. I am who I am I guess. Michael |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Sky~ apologies for any tears. Would definitely take you up on that chicken-noodle soup tonight though. that would change my tone for sure. Michael |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Never been to Oxnard, Paul, but in '84 I did fly into New Orleans and drive to Mississippi from there to spend the summer with a friend. interesting coincidence on the timing. Michael |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
"Never move on, all hope withdrawn Believing yourself cursed. When loved found true must start where you Somehow love yourself first?" I've always been doubtful about this loving yourself first thing. Still, this struck me. While the whole thing is definitely sad it still has some kicking here and there. Now. As far as your comment about trying not to write sad things, your punishment for not writing for that reason is 5 lashes! Then you have to write about those.  "How much is real? So much to question |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Michael...I now live in South Mississippi having been born and raised about 60 miles south of New Orleans where the Ms. River empties into the Gulf Of Mexico. I bet you and the humidity didn't get along very well that summer...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ Paul |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Jenn, I never thought that saying held any merit at all for most of my life. I am starting to have a change of perspective on it though. While most of my life I have been miserable, I have also been adamantly defensive of my right to that misery...spitefully, through gritted teeth, willfully challenging anyone who proposed taking my one piece of meat away from me. With so much devotion to hanging on to this, to letting it be the sole thing that defined me, I never realized it was I, myself, and absolutely no one else keeping myself from other opportunities, and other perspective life is more than capable of providing. For someone who has spent a lifetime faultfinding on himself, learning to love oneself is not an easy proposition. Still, being told I am chemically imbalanced is one thing, but to give up on every possible good aspect of life because of it is entirely different, and that was the route I had been on. I have found peace, and growth to be attainable. I also have found the depressions to be much more manageable if I feed my brain a healthier diet. Not sure if taking better care of myself constitutes loving myself, but I know I am a better person for it. Not only for myself, but for everyone I love. Do they not deserve to have me at my best? If I am at my worst, I am hurting them as much as I am myself, so that's where I start to see there's a little more in that saying. Now, about those lashes. I was counting...you snuck an extra in there! Will definitely be writing about that. Michael Now. As far as your comment about trying not to write sad things, your punishment for not writing for that reason is 5 lashes! Then you have to write about those. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
lol Paul, yeah....the humidity and I do not get along well. Truthfully the only reason I live in California today. Michael |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Learned a lot about you here, Michael. I like to know the people I enjoy reading. I live in El Monte, CA. (near LA) I have to admit that Bakersfield is not a vacation destiny of mine. I have been through there a few times. We all have our lessons to learn in this life and I think the more troubles we have the more accelerated our learning path and the closer to graduation we are. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
"We all have our lessons to learn in this life and I think the more troubles we have the more accelerated our learning path and the closer to graduation we are." I think I graduated with honors, Ida Thank you for your kind words. Michael |
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Starmcneil 1955 Member Posts 174 Alberta, Canada |
Such dark pain and loneliness in your words...I try to move into the light where I can spread my wings and fly...not into the sun but into eternity...great writing |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Flying into eternity is a beautiful image, Karen. The light provides a much better vantage point to life, this much I know. Michael |
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