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Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

0 posted 2012-12-23 08:25 PM

It had been years
but I was reckless when that certain devil
took ahold of me
and it all came rolling back
so fast
I was there before any chance
of merciful intervention
could intervene

The bar was the same
even if the town was not
the alcohol haze just another
spent night
after night
in the arms of no one
but the smoke stained walls
and a tall, cold glass of Southern Comfort

First, the crackle
as mikes and guitars
connected to amps

I barely noticed
but I recognized the song
before the first riff
reached my feeling self
and I braced instinctively
for the punch to my gut

The stage was between me and the door
She was between me and the door

Scorched photos passed dizzy
swirling, sparking to dust
falling as if from unlivable height
I struggled to keep
my step in check
and turned towards the sound
of her steel guitar

She as determined
as any woman I'd ever seen
not to meet my shaky gaze

I bit hard
the inside
of my alcohol numbed lip
until I tasted the salt
of my own blood

I was ready

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2012-12-23 09:57 PM

OMG Duncan's in the house!!! wooohoo! I remember poetry like this from a long long time ago, you still got it kiddo!!
These couple lines speak to me of the feeling of trying so hard to act normal.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Scorched photos passed dizzy
swirling, sparking to dust
falling as if from unlivable height
I struggled to keep
my step in check
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Glad to see you're still alive goob!!
Merry Christmas and stuff!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2013-01-05 01:59 AM

Very nice...James

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2013-01-05 11:08 AM

It is so nice to be reading some of pips past poets today. Like Lori said, you still have "it". Hope you stick around for awhile.

M

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

4 posted 2013-01-05 01:16 PM

Very well written, my friend...ejoyed!

j.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

5 posted 2013-01-10 12:08 PM

Excellent verse.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2013-01-10 01:05 PM

I've missed you....welcome home!

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

7 posted 2013-01-10 04:27 PM

HI! Liked the poem.

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

8 posted 2013-01-13 08:42 PM

wow... a Duncan poem!! What a treat on a Sunday night, I haven't read you in forever. You still got it, I must say... I can feel the apprehension... the raw emotion. Great write, good to read you again

You can never win or lose
If you don't
Run the race

Psychedelic Furs - Love My Way

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

9 posted 2013-01-16 09:13 AM

Yep. I relate, buddy. What an awkward, but fantastic feeling.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

10 posted 2013-01-16 04:26 PM

I think I can hear your heart skipping a beat. I remember those single days.Nice one Duncan.

~Victoria

Love is a smoke made with the fume of sighs.
William Shakespeare

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