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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2012-05-16 10:35 AM

As the sun set last night
I wondered if you watched it
over the rim of your cheap burgundy
the evening rays dancing red light
And from your porch your thoughts did stray
taking a walk miles away
The setting rays upon your face made you smile
as you went to that haven
of your imagination
where your mind does delight
in lines of verse
and story lines yet to traverse
Your writer heart in its prime
savoring images into rhyme
Through the bottom of your glass
you see the sun sink into the swamp
and you go inside and read
your words aloud one last time
before turning in
You sleep the sleep of happy dreams
of a man ready for the tomorrow
that lets him begin again.

LGR©5/16/12

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-05-16 10:44 AM

Lori. I am stunned. Deliriously stunned. I'm flabbergasted to say the least. Thank you, dear heart, I will treasure this until my eyes close for the last time. What a wonderful, magnificent surprise! And yes, cheap California burgundy and my rhymes go glass to hand to keyboard as the sun sets. This is precious, nothing left for me to say, except thank you again.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2012-05-16 10:47 AM

I'm tickled pink you are pleased my friend.

Lori

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

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South Louisiana

3 posted 2012-05-16 10:47 AM

Oh, pleased is not the word, Lori, but it's one of the words.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

[This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (05-16-2012 12:22 PM).]

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

4 posted 2012-05-16 12:08 PM

Smiling...a lovely gift, Lori.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

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Fair to middlin' of nowhere

5 posted 2012-05-16 12:21 PM

thank you Sunshine!

Lori

ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

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California U.S.A

6 posted 2012-05-16 01:29 PM

It is truly a gift, Lori ; gift of a beautiful poem to a friend,
a gift of words that you have created ... a gift that has touched JP and your readers!
Awesome!
Ms. E

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

7 posted 2012-05-16 02:06 PM

Thanks ebonygirl! I'm glad you liked it too.
He is so prolific, it was an easy write.

Lori

Startime1955
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since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

8 posted 2012-05-16 07:42 PM

*smiling* this is a wonderful tribute to a wonderful man...so well done...I could catch the vision easily...*HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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Fair to middlin' of nowhere

9 posted 2012-05-17 09:53 AM

Thanks startime! Have to agree with your assessment of the ole' guy

Lori

JerryPat2
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Posts 16975
South Louisiana

10 posted 2012-05-17 09:55 PM

It's okay with the ole' remark, but then I look around and discover that Lori is correct I am an ole' guy trying to keep up with the world.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

[This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (05-18-2012 06:37 AM).]

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2012-05-18 02:08 AM

Fine writing...James

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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Fair to middlin' of nowhere

12 posted 2012-05-18 08:09 AM

Thanks James!

Lori

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

13 posted 2012-05-19 05:27 AM

Lori
This is excellent and you got it just right.
He's a very talented writer and this is a good tribute.
Sometimes with the ol glass in hand comes some marvelous revelations.

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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Fair to middlin' of nowhere

14 posted 2012-05-19 05:25 PM

Thanks Eric, that is high praise coming from you, I appreciate it very much.

Lori

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

15 posted 2012-05-20 12:45 PM

There is no better gift, Lori.
Ida

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

16 posted 2012-05-20 08:53 PM

Such a beauty! I think you had Jerry's head spinning. Such a great write, Lori.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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Fair to middlin' of nowhere

17 posted 2012-05-22 03:03 PM

Thanks Ida! I'm happy both you and Jerry liked it.

Lori

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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Fair to middlin' of nowhere

18 posted 2012-05-22 03:04 PM

LOL JL, you may be right about that. Thanks for the compliments on the poem

Lori

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