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Strangers in an Elevator
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Strangers in an Elevator |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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New Orleans, June 10, 2011 meeting my son at the Le Pavillon Hotel got on the elevator a woman had just gotten on I slipped by the closing door she'd scooted toward the back of the car to the right doors closed then an uncomfortable silence overcame the car as it always does when strangers become trapped together in elevators in the highly polished brass trim of the door I could see her face she was looking up her eyes riveted at the lights over the door marking our ascent she was very attractive so much so I found it difficult to avert my eyes hoping she wouldn't catch me staring still I had a feeling she knew she was being watched I've always felt attractive women are aware eyes drifting toward them ~ It's amazing how many women a woman can be. ~ [This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (07-05-2011 10:57 PM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Love how you catured this slice of life. Seems to me that human awareness is heightened in elevators and tight quarters... the air is limited as is our personal space. good on ya, JP~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Appreciate it, Blues. I have been in some very uncomfortable situations in elevators with women. No, I do not blame them for being distant and aloof. It is a vicious world out there for the weaker among us. Thanks for stopping by. ~ It's amazing how many women a woman can be. ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Elevators are the worst or the best depending upon who you share the ride with...some people or children are just plain charming or creepy. Good write! Lori |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Most perspicacious, Jerry. A particularly interesting and debatable viewpoint at the end, too. Smiles. Owl |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Lori, and I agree with you. ~ It's amazing how many women a woman can be. ~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks Owl. What's debatable? That attractive women know people look at them? ~ It's amazing how many women a woman can be. ~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Yep, Jerry. Owl |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Why? You don't think attractive women notice when people look at them? I don't understand the underlying thing here. Please inform me what about that statement is debatable? You seem to be making something out of nothing, Owl. ~ It's amazing how many women a woman can be. ~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks James. ~ Husbands are chiefly good lovers when they are betraying their wives.--Marilyn Monroe ~ |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Good poem, J.P. "I've always felt attractive women are aware eyes drifting toward them" Attrractive or not, I think they are all aware when our eyes drift towards them. And I think most of the time they are flattered by that. But so as to not make them uincomfortable I wear sun glasses to hide my lear...lol |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I hear you Ice. I just try not to leer, sunglasses work. Thanks for stopping by. ~ Husbands are chiefly good lovers when they are betraying their wives.--Marilyn Monroe ~ |
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