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Autumn Beach Party (Pantoum)
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Autumn Beach Party (Pantoum) |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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Bonfires spark embers in the night Waves wash kelp along a sandy shore Laughter weaves among conversations Sun sinks beyond volcanic peaks Waves wash kelp along a sandy shore Lovers cuddle out of fire’s light Sun sinks beyond volcanic peaks Children chase seagulls to water’s edge Lovers cuddle out of fire’s light Sharing moments of intimacy Children chase seagulls to water’s edge Shrieking with joy of utter freedom Sharing moments of intimacy Darkness washes colored sunset pale Shrieking with joy of utter freedom Eagles dance above in thermals warmth Darkness washes colored sunsets pale Wishes cast upon stars peering down Eagles dance above in thermals warmth Settling gently under peace of night Wishes cast upon stars peering down Parents snuggle sleeping children close Settling gently under peace of night Moon tugging steadily at the tides --- Alison [This message has been edited by Alison (03-11-2008 07:04 PM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
How utterly beautiful, dear Alison!! It is joyful and peaceful and I must say the repetition in this form brings a very lovely tune ... You are so good, I can feel that you enjoy doing these special forms. Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Loved it! Beautifully done. jimmy |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Alison, You have done a very good job on this very difficult form. Good work. Bobby |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Woooo, 'oos a clever girl then? Now, You Listen Here! Clap, Clap, Clap.. ( That is serious applause but I would not want SHDP accusing me of plagiarism now would I?) J |
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LadyTom Member
since 2008-02-29
Posts 353LA, CA |
Very good lady. Beautiful. I have not been able to write one. I will try someday. enjoyed. |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
A beautiful post Alison, so well done. Lindsay |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Beautiful write in a very difficult form (one of my favorite forms actually) Nicely done lady A. Hugs. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Darling Margherita, I am enjoying trying out different forms. It is a pleasure to play with them. I really need to work on meter and such - but it all seems like such a math problem and when I read all the slashes and stuff, I feel like I am trying to learn a foreign language. One day, I'll knuckle down and work on all of that. Thank you for reading and writing such warm and loving responses. xoxoxo love, Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Jimmy, Thank you so much. You know that your words mean a great deal to me. Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Bobby, Thank you, my friend. I am trying to learn. I keep thinking that someday this will all click for me. A |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
John, Thank you lots and lots. You make me laugh. Alison PS - I don't think that SHDP will mind if you use "serious applause" - and I would rather that you don't spread the "Clap. Clap. Clap." thing. Just a thought. A |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
LT I look forward to the day that you do write a Pantoum. It's a lot of fun. It's kind of like knitting (knit one, perl two kinda thing). A |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
My friend, Lindsay - Thank you for the kind words. I am glad that you enjoyed it. Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Donna, Thank you. I am so glad that you are peeking in again around here. I miss you when you are gone too long, you know. xoxoxo A |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed the Write Alison... ARCTIC WIND |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you. AW |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
You are right, I'll be careful what I spread around, I'm sure you would not want to get it again right? |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
This is an interesting form of poetry. I never tried this. You did a fine job with it. Ida |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Alison, I am enjoying you trying your hand at a variety of poetic forms. Once in a while, I do the same. You are doing a very fine job of doing so. At times, when one focuses on form, something can be lost in the poetic value of the poem. However, m'dear, that is definitely not the case with your writing! ~ Content and form, are perfect!  Love & Poetic Light, Linda  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
:: laughs at John :: Touche', my friend. A |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Ida, Thank you. Give it a try when you need something different. It's fun. Thank you. Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Linda, Thank you. I do have to admit that you have been an inspiration to me on these Blue pages. Thank you for that - and for all the kind words and thoughts that you share. xoxoxo Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, James. A |
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