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Open Poetry #40

These Are My Shoes

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2007-04-06 11:49 PM

These Are My Shoes

I am tough
I am tender
I can wear
both well
I fit in
each shoe
with perfection
skin like silk
will of iron
simple in
the intricate
obeying rules
breaking them
reaching out
and pulling in
unafraid of
some things
terrified of others
strength in weakness
weaknesses in strength
sound in
the knowing
of the fire
loving the mystery
of its mist
this is
the woman
that I am

[This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (04-07-2007 12:01 AM).]

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2007-04-06 11:57 PM

and a beautiful woman you are

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

2 posted 2007-04-06 11:59 PM

ceptin' i dont lnow how to put the pic on duhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

giggle

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

3 posted 2007-04-07 02:15 AM

enjoyed. oh.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2007-04-07 07:58 AM

send me the pic in email and I can help ya if you want

SmartChick
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since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

5 posted 2007-04-07 10:28 AM

Sounds like you and I walk in the same kind of shoes.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

6 posted 2007-04-08 02:36 PM

I can see those shoes without the picture Helen

shoes of a tough and tender lady

excellent!

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2007-04-08 03:44 PM

smile---E MAIL the pic, you! I have complete confidence that when you wear your shoes, you really WEAR your shoes, but oh man...I wannna seeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee.

Thanks lady. Know I love ya!

Robert Jordan
Member

since 2007-02-07

Posts 392
Philadelphia Pa USA

8 posted 2007-04-08 04:44 PM

1slick_lady,

This would be improved by using fewer first person singular pronouns. I'd even consider putting it in the third person.

Bobby

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