I hate what I love about you

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Teen Poetry #8

I hate what I love about you

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

0 posted 2007-03-28 11:50 PM

I hate that I jump everytime the phone rings,
abd how when it's you my heart it sings,
I hate having butterflies all day long,
and all that runs through my mind is sappy love songs.

I hate that we're just friends right now,
i wish I could get over that but i don't know how,
I hate how you make me feel like someone loves me,
a while ago I didn't think there was even a possibility,

But I love how you make me smile at everything you say,
and now I always end up wishing for another day,
to hear you say you love me you don't know what I'd do,
but what i hate the most i think i'm falling for you.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

1 posted 2007-05-26 12:56 PM

I really liked this. It flowed nicely, not bumpy at all. I just have one critique:

to hear you say you love me you don't know what I'd do,
but what i hate the most is i think i'm falling for you.

try putting an "is" in there...just a thought

Abbeon
Member

since 2006-11-30

Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder

2 posted 2007-05-28 11:05 PM

I think that this is an amazing poem that actually is you.

Abbeon

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

3 posted 2007-05-29 09:52 PM

wow when i first read it i thought about the movie ten things i hate about you but then i realized your poem was just amazing it describes so many feelings i am sure most people have felt including me great job

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