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Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
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0 posted 2007-07-27 06:45 PM


im resting here on the window pane,
looking through the glass.
i cant seem to get a grip,
i feel like im just falling down too fast.

and the whiskey doesnt drown the pain,
it just adds to my drunken rage.
and adds to the inspiration,
that seems to be filling up the page.

and looking out through this window,
i dont see the other side.
i only see the past played out before me,
its like a sin that i cant hide.

so ill just sit up all night,
writing away my soul.
because its the only thing that i can do,
that makes me feel whole.


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BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03
Posts 461
Come find me?
1 posted 2007-07-27 07:10 PM


"so ill just sit up all night,
writing away my soul.
because its the only thing that i can do,
that makes me feel whole."

I can't tell you how many times i've felt like this! It's a horrible feeling, and if you ever need to talk, you can e-mail me a whodaho@yahoo.com. Such a wonderful, heart-felt poem

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

WaterFairy103
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since 2006-05-31
Posts 196

2 posted 2007-07-28 02:16 AM


Wow, this is incredible.  Good flow and structure... Excellent write.  And you know where to reach me if you need it, : ]

I'm the literary equivalent of a Big Mac and Fries.
- Stephen King

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062
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3 posted 2007-08-05 07:06 PM


heres a faveorite of mine of yours.

-Red

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

hunnie_girl
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since 2006-06-18
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4 posted 2007-08-05 09:51 PM


wow, I really liked this one...
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

forever*wishing
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since 2006-05-29
Posts 178
where my heart is
5 posted 2007-08-14 11:38 PM


wow
.....just wow...i really liked it, and it completely took me by surprise how much i can relate...
nice job! = )

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