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blue room in jeans |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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you said you enjoyed the time and were content with the view of an older man with coffee by a window with sun sometimes in your jeans and freckle places and that gold chain that you wear for him you smiled forgivness for any sins I had dreamed although you knew most of them by now since I described them in detail on purpose just to try to scare you away before falling onto your smile edges with my ribs open we didn't hold hands there, skin to skin anyway but the thoughts did cross my mind and yours when I wasn't looking so we just made love in glances and didn't talk about the residue that lingered until later when we were alone with our hands touching each other's eyes and lips and pretending we were not pretending and that the rain was not really rain but some lover's sun shining into a blue room where we would see each other in each other's eyes _______________ daark (forbidden) |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think both the palms series, as well as the forbidden series, would make for very interesting pockets reading material, don't you?  Thanks for making my morning sing.  |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Once, when I was at a loss of what to say, a friend told me to say it in a poem. I am waiting for words to reaturn. You leave me speechless. A |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sun...thanks babe...would I get in trouble writing in people's pockets? (grin) ______________ ms ali-san..oh stop it..you speechless? sleeping don't count as talk time, thanks babe |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
so many parts of this are so good...almost feel like I'm doing the rest a disservice by only picking one part to comment on: "just to try to scare you away before falling onto your smile edges with my ribs open" ...interesting turn of the phrase...creative way to get your point across...which it does very well |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
steavenR..thanks amigo...I do appreciate your read |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Of course sleep counts as talk time (mutters about you being a man and wouldn't know anyway!)! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san (as he turns his hearing aid back on briefly) were you moving your mouth in my direction? |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks Van |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
you make my breath quicken as i race down the page for the spot where you slip it in on me |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
yawns ... then cracks up! ~ You know I have been waiting for that opportunity!!! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms inky, thanks lady friend, you smile me ________________ ms ali-san..not sure you would want to do that in front of me.. |
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Indigo Senior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 602 |
starbucks rendezvous breve afternoons, so rich with stolen glances. Indigo |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
so ms indi...coffee sometime? thanks lady |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I have read it (more than once) and it is quicksilver ... free running emotion, you can't stop it from invading you ...  Love, Margherita  |
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