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Cantilevered Tux
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Cantilevered Tux |
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Burk28 Member
since 2009-01-08
Posts 80Michigan USA |
Cantilevered tuxedos pitched in prom dress dreaming, wrinkled corsages in back seat hotel V-eights. Racing down a road where no one knows the destination, the experience, the lessons…Tail lights and white line flashing past, flashing incandescent guardrail innocence. Post pubescence ticking like a time bomb, Isosceles pink flamingo, dead rabbit diapers in post backseat maternity, buzzing baby intercom with the cries of knee biter and her fourteen year old mother. Cannot tell whose tears are buzzing through. And more than likely, that cantilevered tux, is being pressed for just another go. Engine fired and waiting. And little Mother’s party dress is torn and faded, bloodied in afterbirths tears, her corsage; all but a bad memory, turned to pungent dust regret. ________________________________________ Peace of mind can only be achieved when we find peace with self |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A powerful, impressive tale, dear B.., with a touch of Saturday Night Fever atmosphere ... Love, Margherita |
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Burk28 Member
since 2009-01-08
Posts 80Michigan USA |
Thank you for your kind comments Peace of mind can only be achieved when we find peace with self |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Man! Do I have to be more articulate that that? How about, "Man!" A |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
powerfully descriptive write...with lots of guidance buried within...like this phrase: "Racing down a road where no one knows the destination, the experience, the lessons…" ..impressive, very impressive... "pungent dust regret"...neat word choices |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Now, if only you had a better vocabulary ... lol Love your 'loquaciousness'!  I agree with Margherita about this tale having a "Saturday Night Fever atmosphere to it". Great writing!  EA |
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Burk28 Member
since 2009-01-08
Posts 80Michigan USA |
Wow, thank you evryone for your kind remarks and taking the time to read this piece, Much appreciated Peace of mind can only be achieved when we find peace with self |
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