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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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This isn't a song. . Coming home a graceless tired man in my head I walked the line that nature taught me with my hands through stained windows growing up. bearing down on pleasure's purpose I pressed myself to my insides like an ostrich head in sand where dreams of greatness seem to hide making widows of the ones I loved a ventriloquist of myth my soft reply. my inside stranger my closest friend with a sea of liars swimming round me with the long day crystalized in apprehend where I could catch myself within my loss then coming home to hold and squeeze found arms for miles wrapped round me............ love ya baby you make my nights! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This line here totally intrigues me: "my inside stranger my closest friend" ah, but that's a lot of clever to think about for me. (I love stuff like that, too.) And then to take such self-examination and end it with an exuberant embrace of others (or at least one other) serves to emphasize the paradox proposed. Love it.  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Celeste Love ya kid! And, thanks for the visit....Youse gals from NAWLINS are so insightful......(smile).... Eric |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Favorite lines... quote: and why, you ask? [Of course, you asked!] Because I live with this, every day, not by me, but by me in the name of husband. Eric, you outdo you.  |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Eric, I'm afraid I don't understand this at all. However, that's just me. Bobby |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
Eric, A very interesting approach, with quite a few lines that had me pause somewhat. I had to reread a few times, mostly because I felt compelled to go deeper and deeper below its surface. And the deeper I go, the stronger the pull of the eddy of your words. An enjoyable experience. Mark |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Karilea Why is what I asked.......And your answer is life like this poem. Take care dear lady and thanks for the visit and comment. Eric |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"with the long day crystalized in apprehend where I could catch myself within my loss" perfect lines... wished arms were wrapping for miles around here  M |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Bobby Sorry you don't understand it I can see why. It's simply about a guy having an extremely rough day on the job. A cloud of darkness runs through him and these thoughts escape from his inner self.....Or, something like that. (smile) Always good to hear from you. Eric [This message has been edited by ethome (03-05-2009 05:33 PM).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Marc Glad you took a couple of reads and found some enjoyment there. I appreciate the read and the comment. Ya'll come back now. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Maureen You deserve the wrap around for sure. Thanks for the read and the kind words. Eric |
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