Fury's Weather (Tanka, PdV's Challenge)

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Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

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Winnipeg

0 posted 2001-03-30 05:36 PM

Within the darkness
Within the falling of rain
Poetry Haven
Candle burns the windowpane
Fury's weather, why remain?

(There. I used the "Tanka" format. Go me.

Hope you all enjoyed it.)

[This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 03-30-2001).]

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

1 posted 2001-03-30 06:38 PM

Allan, I did indeed like it!! And it's nice to SEE you!!!

Dopey Dope

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2 posted 2001-03-31 07:31 PM

Nice to see you....good tanka....this is the first i've seen you try and you did quite well.

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

3 posted 2001-04-02 12:09 PM

I'd say well done, but I don't know if it is (I have no idea how to write a tanka!)

BUT, that's beside the point - I enjoyed it nontheless, challenge well met!

Elizabeth

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4 posted 2001-05-10 10:12 PM

Nice Allan!

Linc

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The Backstreet Boy

5 posted 2001-05-11 02:04 PM

Hey,

This is really cool I might have to tanka one day

I really liked. Until your next masterpiece (someone tell me if I am not posed to be here Marie told me its a Senior Member form and I an not a senior member yet

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

[This message has been edited by Linc (edited 05-11-2001).]

Yu Lan
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6 posted 2001-08-17 07:51 PM

I'm a little confused now as to what the tanka form is, as I've seen so many different versions of it, lol.. So.. um.. what is it? I think I'm getting it mixed up with a cinquain.

I'm not sure this would be one of your best Allan, there is nothing particularly WRONG with it, it's not bad, but it hasn't quite got that.. grab, that a lot of your poetry does..
-smiles, Lynne

Nothing in life, if you study it close enough, and long enough, makes sense. But only once you have understood why it doesn’t make sense, can you be s

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

7 posted 2001-08-17 08:55 PM

yeah it does stink! hehe... I was rushing rushing to get it done though, and had no ideas.

tanka is 5-7-5-7-7 sylls

Fading Away

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8 posted 2001-08-19 03:51 PM

Heh.. def. not your best, deary

But it was pretty cool nonetheless. Nice images

I should write a tanka... but you know me a formats. I like this one!

--Marie

If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car.

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