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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2006-12-31 04:12 PM


Coping

My passing has too many divisions for my minds coping
And in the very grappling the teeter board starts its whacking
The lifting of the high and low passes season’s sun and snow
I often finds the sifting a problem with its unknown flow  

The winding and the coursing often leave an awful bruising
And in the process holding on this battle I am loosing
The mystery of the futures bring echoes of insanity
When looking back at history mystery is fantasy

It’s willing that I thrive on seems and dreams that settle my mind
They are my ego smiling the making of a pleasures find
Its subtle findings non exist, subtle findings in shuttle
Sink those ships down in scuttle letting my mind a rebuttal

The mutate is a magic ride someplace for my heart to hide
A rebate for my mandate pride all in dreams of nights abide
A muffling of reality, played on be or not to be
A pantomime in shuffling, made of a bree from out the sea


Did I come close?

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1 posted 2006-12-31 06:30 PM


Looks like a dead ringer Sy!
But, you'll have to ask the expert 'Deer.
All the best to you and yours in 2007!


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2 posted 2006-12-31 11:00 PM



Dear, sweet Sy...even if you didn't come close [because I only hear the rhythm, it seems...] still I would read any of yours, because it all becomes sweet dreams!  Thank you, wonderful poet....that you have the heart to try!  I would fail, woefully...because at first when I read the challenge, why it sounded a lot like me!  [ and that can't be write!  Right?]



Happy New Year, Sy!


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3 posted 2007-01-01 08:42 AM


Seymour~
Absolutely SPOT ON !!
But then ... that's not unusual for you~

Happy New Year dear poet~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2007-01-01 08:45 AM


Nancy,
Thank you and you know I wish you all the best.

Sunshine,
I hope you had a great New Year and thank you for your wonderful friendship.

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2007-01-01 08:48 AM


Marge  
Those are the best words I've read this year. You are a delight you know.

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6 posted 2007-01-02 01:00 PM


whoa!!!!!  Excellent write Bro!!!!

Seriously, this is one of my fav's of yours


Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2007-01-02 01:09 PM


LeeJ,
Thank you so much sweety, I almost gave up
Looking for a straight answer.

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8 posted 2007-01-02 01:14 PM


gr8 write, Sy

Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2007-01-02 01:17 PM


Interloper
Your comment does my heart good. Thank you

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10 posted 2007-01-02 04:09 PM


Sy, my friend, you get an A for effort for even attempting it! Hats off to you

(as for the rest, we'll discuss it when I come over )

Kethry
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11 posted 2007-01-02 04:40 PM


I don't know the challenge but I do know you and I know you never miss the mark...not even in the dark.
Hoppy New Ears.

Keth

a good commitee can decimate communication.

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 2007-01-02 05:05 PM


Balladeer
Thanks Mike, looking forward to the rest.  
See you soon.

Kethry
Enjoyed your reply, thank you my friend.

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13 posted 2007-01-02 06:35 PM


better you should give it a try than me...it was too much thinking  for me today~~


M

Seymour Tabin
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14 posted 2007-01-02 07:46 PM


Maureen,
Thanks for letting me go first. LOL

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15 posted 2008-01-25 10:55 AM


~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email -       noles1@totcon.com     

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16 posted 2008-01-25 12:21 PM


You came  more than close, Sy.....
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17 posted 2009-01-01 04:13 AM


Remembering and taking a page from your wisdom~~


M


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