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Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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0 posted 2006-12-18 08:55 PM



Lately your eyes betray you
They no longer linger like they did
When they look at me I see distrust
When they look at me I see distaste
Lately your smile betrays you
It no longer has a meaning behind it
When you smile at me I see an emptiness
When you smile at me I see a loss

Lately…. I feel the same way too


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passing shadows
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displaced
1 posted 2006-12-18 09:12 PM


I surely relate

yes I do

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2006-12-18 09:53 PM


ms b...now you know why lovers keep their eyes closed..and why love is blind..if not it would not exist..

enjoyed this ms

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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3 posted 2006-12-18 10:00 PM


Dixie... thanks for your understanding RDB x

Mr Dark... ah so that's what I'm doing wrong!  close the eyes RDB close the eyes! x

ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2006-12-19 09:14 AM


A lingering write, dear Poetess;
The heart sees, eyes open or not.  
Well done.
TD

twinkyfl1
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5 posted 2006-12-19 07:11 PM


It makes one wonder how such bright beginings, can and often do turn into dismal endings.

Love makes the world go round and the opposite can cause it to stop.

Don't let it get you down, cause eventually the carousel will turn again.

Wonderfully and evocatively penned.

jwesley
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6 posted 2006-12-19 08:02 PM


Wonderful write! Could see the two of you looking at one another, but not.

jwesley

The Lady
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7 posted 2006-12-19 09:42 PM



well done Roniece

I love the ending


Earth Angel
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8 posted 2006-12-20 02:13 AM


M'dear, when you smile at a mirror, the smile that is reflected back to you is one of beauty and your glorious spirit.

Love & Christmas Light,

Linda



Honeybunch
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9 posted 2006-12-20 04:29 AM


Oh, yes, I can so well relate to this.  I have been told in a case like this that it is only my perception and not necessarily true but I surely have learnt the hard way not to doubt my perceptions - eyes open or closed!
JamesMichael
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10 posted 2006-12-21 09:14 PM


Sad but true, but when one gives up on the relationship, the other is finished...it always takes two for a relationship to grow...James
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