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Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

0 posted 2006-12-14 02:07 PM

The path turns fallow beneath my feet
bare and brown
so much youth beat within
a sin it seems to shod the truth
and casually walk around
as if time wasn't a circle
you woke to

God is the question still
and though I see the warming light
it is my own with wings and flight
and the guts of glory
that came from drowning
and the question who is dead

I have loved the lace in time
such pretty weaving catches me
planting well the seed that wonders
always asking slow or fast
detesting the blood of the righteous
to save the sisters and daughters
from the strangle of skin

The petals mold and droop into goodbye
even from the rigid frozen winter
and to see them stir the air
takes purity
and I despair my lack

Though I have taken songless wind
and with my ear created harmony
unglued the glass
and rubbed the wood until
my fingers ached
and still questioned why I worked the love
into the finish to feel it there smooth
and unafraid of weather
while my soft skin ached from the strum
yet still with joy succumbed

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2006-12-14 02:20 PM

while my soft skin ached from the strum
yet still with joy succumbed

you have composed a master piece here, which in intensity is as beautiful as the earth's sun rise above a calming sea...Martie, this was spectacular.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2006-12-14 02:37 PM

Martie
I agree with Lee on this. You are a delight to read.

Interloper

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since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

3 posted 2006-12-14 03:06 PM

I will cast my vote with the other two

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2006-12-14 03:07 PM

This is so softly beautiful Martie....Hugs...

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2006-12-14 03:22 PM

...

So beautiful I am left speechless.

Sing in me muse...
and through me tell the story~

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

6 posted 2006-12-14 03:32 PM

........sigh......I needed a ride like this, just now I mean, this exact moment....and what conveyance better than Martie's magic carpet?

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Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

7 posted 2006-12-14 03:41 PM

I love the second stanza. But then the final stanza is so good. I guess I have to love them both.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

8 posted 2006-12-14 04:16 PM

and I agree with everyone

you are a delight and I am speechless
incredibly intense Martie

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

9 posted 2006-12-16 04:56 PM

More than a ramble,
a heart-tense moment

...and I dare anyone to read this aloud
and now come away with a sense of awe...

When you delve, you do it well.
This is top-rate, Martie...

now publish.

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

10 posted 2006-12-16 10:25 PM

WOW
Remarkable Martie sweet poetess.
hugs, Chris

Perhaps the best Yuletide decoration is being wreathed in smiles ~

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

11 posted 2006-12-17 12:23 PM

Well, Martie dear, I certainly don't have to read this aloud to come away in awe of your talent! You have a gift and you use it well!

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

12 posted 2006-12-17 12:29 PM

It is so different, but in an awesome way.
Much enjoyed the humbling read.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

13 posted 2006-12-17 12:39 PM

MartieSis~
Okay ... now I've done it ... caught in the act of opening my Christmas gift early !!!

'I have loved the lace in time
such pretty weaving catches me'

'Though I have taken songless wind
and with my ear created harmony'

YEP ! I LOVE IT ... and it's a PERFECT FIT !

So very, very Martiesque ... thank you for this early Christmas gift~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

Goodknight
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Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

14 posted 2006-12-17 03:47 PM

You just write magic and it enthralls us all - loved this Martie - Paul

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