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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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you had other sides to your castle with your own private dragon and demons to play in the sand with those winter afternoons in baja I was the boat man from habana the south side below beverly, herding land yachts for charter for the whisper shin girls in velvet we took vacations separately on purpose being strangers made it easier for you to shop at bloomingales for skimpy somethings you modeled on the nude clothesline between us so I could imagine you without them and you could pretend I was the only one that ever really enjoyed those ybor nights when you were somewhere south of else town ________ daark [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (12-14-2006 09:08 AM).] |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
on the nude clothesline between us so I could imagine you without them and you could pretend I was the only one that ever really enjoyed those ibor nights when you were somewhere south of else town stunning D. love the way you have with words... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
You sir, are magical....  Wave that wand for me ok.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms leej, thanks for driving by lady friend ______________ ms gs, thank you for wanding this set of splinters |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Oh yeah. And the pretend is sometimes more real than the real, man. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Stranger darlin’ thinking ‘bout skimpy somethings and ybor nights makes breathing a little difficult but oh so nice |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
"I was the boat man from habana the south side below beverly, herding land yachts for charter for the whisper shin girls in velvet" It's all great, but I'm partial to this verse. Can see it and hear it in a song. Lyricists would love to turn a verse like that. Warmest hugs Dark man. Love, Reg |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms nan, thank you for the eyes here _______________ ladyone, thank you for walking by this dime of time ______________ mswood, the words always look better when you write them in your lipstick, thanks babe |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
I was the boat man from habana the south side below beverly, herding land yachts for charter for the whisper shin girls in velvet ah Mr Dark, I go away for a weekend and I come back to read your beautiful words... lovely! RDB could you please decipher 'shin girls' for me though?  |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
You know what Dark? I've figured something out. I've been reading a lot of your stuff lately and I saw a pattern. You write usually four stanzas that are four or five lines each and ending the poem on a single line. Very interesting that you do that. Just something I noticed. Ed And I said to the devil, "You better leave my spleen alone." |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms b, whisper shin is bare legged silky sound wearing evening gowns...that noise leg skin makes when it brushes together seductively? thanks for the eyes ms. _____________ friend ed, yes I like to do 3 or 4 or sometimes 5 segments and a summary sound of one line at the end usually, thank you for the reads guy! |
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