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trutodaraiders
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0 posted 2006-12-09 12:12 PM



What creature's... imperfect are we,
Our hearts to lead us lost?
And journey on the stormy sea,
'Tis a journey must be crossed.

We blindly see what wasn't there,
As man- less water... the image sees,
A mirage of beauty- she didn't care,
He falls down lost upon his knees.

His image gone and ne'er returns,
A journey now at end,
A tortured soul- his lesson learned,
'Til another mirage for him does send.
      

Poetry is just the evidence of life.
If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. "
Leon Cohen~



© Copyright 2006 Bill Franklin - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
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1 posted 2006-12-09 02:35 AM


We may be imperfect creatures but you write a perfect rhyme.

a good commitee can decimate communication.

trutodaraiders
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2 posted 2006-12-09 03:46 AM


Thank You. I have read a few of your poems coming from you is a very nice compliment
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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3 posted 2006-12-09 07:44 AM


Bill, our dear sweet Kethry writes some beautiful lines as do you my friend... RDB
passing shadows
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4 posted 2006-12-09 07:57 AM


bittersweet...lovely write
The Lady
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5 posted 2006-12-10 03:54 PM




"What creature's... imperfect are we,
Our hearts to lead us lost?"

your work is lovely Bill
and this thought... amazing


Beatrice Boyle
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6 posted 2006-12-10 06:41 PM


Unrequited love is one of the saddest things to go through in life. But then...maybe that's the attraction for us.

Very nicely done.

Bea

Grandma Bea

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