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The Lady
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0 posted 2006-12-05 06:11 PM


If I could just touch your ankle, he whispers, there
on the outside, above the bone
   ~Rita Dove

what if I’d said no
don’t touch there
   or there either
‘cause it’s most too hard  
to shake    
that feelin’ of rime  
that forms at the edges    
that icy who are you feelin’    
makes questions spark  
fires the mind with hot

what if I’d said no
don’t touch there
   it burns
leaves tiny red marks
on the brown
I ain’t fixin’    
to let you mark me  
done that before  
never did turn out right

what if I’d said no
don’t touch there
    it hurts
have mercy
with god’s own glory
I swear
it hurts

not now
no

but someday it hurts
I can feel it

[This message has been edited by The Lady (12-05-2006 11:51 PM).]

© Copyright 2006 Kate - All Rights Reserved
trutodaraiders
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1 posted 2006-12-05 06:20 PM


nice

Poetry is just the evidence of life.
If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. "
Leon Cohen~



Midnitesun
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2 posted 2006-12-05 07:07 PM


~sigh~
what if, indeed, you said no to the burn?
to rejecting a passion's FEEL...

Gentle Spirit
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3 posted 2006-12-05 07:33 PM


Kate, this somehow reminds me...moth to flame....

slow burn in your words here Lady....can feel it, yet somehow see the Phoenix

rising...

hugs you...

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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4 posted 2006-12-05 10:00 PM


Kate... this is a good write - enjoyed
RDB

The Lady
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5 posted 2006-12-05 11:59 PM




Thank you Bill

Janis sang
get it while you can
don’t you turn your back on love
Kacy…
never say no to the burn
right?

gentle Donna  
this is 199%
moth to the flame
and Phoenix rising too
you read me so well

hugs you back

thank you Roniece

Gentle Spirit
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6 posted 2006-12-06 08:25 AM


Slow the burn
of moth to flame

smoldering ash swirls
clutching chest

phoenix rising

breathing,
breathing deeply

breath fills lungs
with fresh air

scented in the hope
of a new dawn.

     ~~~~~~


Martie
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7 posted 2006-12-06 10:06 AM


Lady....To not be touched hurts worse.
Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2006-12-06 10:11 AM


ladyone, ah just a little touch..trust me, I'm a doctor...occasionaly..enjoyed this ms
Sunshine
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9 posted 2006-12-06 11:29 AM



For those days,
you need more
than an aspirin.




sewasham
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10 posted 2006-12-06 12:04 PM


We have to dare to take the plunge. Great job. Take care and Have fun. Steve


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Deep in the heart
11 posted 2006-12-06 12:46 PM


what if you said no
would I continue or stop
what does your heart say
does it tell you to submit
do your eyes betray your lips

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Angel4aKing
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12 posted 2006-12-06 01:04 PM


that icy who are you feelin’    
makes questions spark  
fires the mind with hot


I have been here to recently....I really like this one....

kingsangel

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13 posted 2006-12-06 04:01 PM


I think i agree with Martie....it always hurts so much when not touched...but the poem is still brilliant..thank you....

Goldenrose.


At the touch of love, everyone becomes poets. Plato 427 BC-348.

The Lady
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14 posted 2006-12-06 04:33 PM


ahhh gentle Donna  
I think I need to talk to you    
hugs


Martie  
you are so right…  

Stranger darlin’  
I know you’re a doctor  
I’ve seen your stethoscope
kewl
what do you think those little red marks are
chigger bites?
thank you for your consultation

Karilea  
you’re so right
aspirin just causes more heartburn


thank you Steve

ahhh Interloper  
you peeked at my eyes  
thank you

nice place to be
isn’t it Angel?  
thank you

thank you Goldenrose

catalinamoon
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15 posted 2006-12-06 06:16 PM


I liked this very much. Have you ever heard of Merrit Malloy? She was a favorite poet of  mine in the 70's. This reminds me of her writing. Very powerful and emotional.
Sandra

Edward Grim
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16 posted 2006-12-06 08:17 PM


I like that you put the quote there. Very good writing. Most won't beleive me but I really wish I could write stuff like this. Cheers     - Ed

And I said to the devil, "You better leave my spleen alone."

The Lady
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17 posted 2006-12-06 10:45 PM



Sandra
somehow Merrit Malloy slipped past me
but I’m on her trail now and will read her  
thank you for your reply

ah Ed
you are so hard hitting
so strong
why would you want to change your style?
thank you


miscellanea
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18 posted 2006-12-09 10:05 PM


I love what ifs, so you can see how this title grabbed me.  Without what ifs, would Edison have ever...????   Like Edison and in his developing of the light bulb, how many failures and risks before great success?  Love, too, can be full of risks I suppose, but probably a lot more fun and heart wrenching!   Enjoyed your poetry,

misc  

                  

Larry C
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19 posted 2006-12-09 10:16 PM


Kate,
Now you've gone and congered up a lovely memory. The first time, ever, I touched my wife we sat at a dining table visiting with a mutual friend. She had her foot on the rung of my chair and I dropped my hand and held her ankle. It burned us both without regret. Lovely write.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

The Lady
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20 posted 2006-12-09 10:43 PM


thank you misc  
I think love is probably a lot more fun  
than developing a light bulb  
but failure in either
can be so frustrating

oh Larry    
what a lovely story  
thank you for sharing
your burn without regret



FNG
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21 posted 2006-12-12 12:03 PM


new skin forms where we were once burnt...a good thing too.

FNG

The Lady
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22 posted 2006-12-12 12:09 PM




so true FNG

thank you

Enchantress
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23 posted 2007-01-19 09:43 AM


And just how did I miss this touching piece?!
WOW!!

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

Earth Angel
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24 posted 2007-01-19 10:45 AM


I'm so pleased that interloper brought this poem to my attention! I can see why your poem was a source of inspiration to him!


Linda

The Lady
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25 posted 2007-01-19 06:54 PM




thank you Nancy

thank you so much
Linda Angel




Angel4aKing
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26 posted 2007-02-07 03:08 PM


I know the feeling...when you want to scream "ANYWHERE BUT THERE"!!!! I di dit again replying twice to the same post. Hmmmm

~~~kingsangel~~~

The Lady
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27 posted 2007-02-07 10:25 PM



it's ok angel
thank you again


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