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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I know of affirmations that I should recite, and even words I find absurd incite me in the night. My subconscious, reprimanding, living in the flesh, demanding, judge and jury notwithstanding-- voices clamour in my mind. Silences that should be kept Stifled tears that should be wept volcano grows beneath the rug where my memories were swept... voices mocking in my mind. Bridges leading anywhere Taxi cabs are at my door The roads curve long in sweet "come on" my soul in ache to taste of more-- voices wretched in my mind. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Every word... Your art never disappoints me, K. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, LOL I've had days like that. Good write.  |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
a very compelling and powerful read; when I read this, the force behind it swept me quickly forward and left its mark; I love your poetry, Serenity! Your words are perfectly chosen to move the reader in more than one way, with speed and emotion. Great to read your poetry again. misC |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
It's really lovely to know I can always find a friend (or three) here... and damn Dunc-- grin if all it takes is a repost from me to wake you the hell up...shrug...write something new for me, will ya? I miss you much lovie. Thanks to sweet sy and missie, too!  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i feel the restlessness in this and the reaching for something |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Silences that should be kept Stifled tears that should be wept volcano grows beneath the rug where my memories were swept... Yup. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
"My subconscious, reprimanding, living in the flesh, demanding, judge and jury notwithstanding--" You know the older Willy Wonka, when they take the boat down the river, the way I heard that line in my head sounded like how he talks at that part, if that makes any sense. Anyhow, another great write lady. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Silences that should be kept Stifled tears that should be wept yeah wow |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I wish I had a door prize--I think Allysa just identified the voice in me head! hugs to all my lovelies, and Dix? *slap me five* Hurricane Season is over.  (remind me not to exhale--I may stir up somethin'...  ) |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Just affirm that you will keep on writing and posting on the blue pages  Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Silences that should be kept Stifled tears that should be wept" Oh yeah....love it! And the new pic!  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Gosh I've missed reading in here lately. Just snuck in here this early morn for a peak and look what I found! Love this...and feel it, too. You definitely have some empathy here, Ser. ....jo |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"My subconscious, reprimanding, funny thing about minds... love the new picture~~ M |
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stevepoet Junior Member
since 2006-12-02
Posts 46 |
Nice.I liked this a lot.good flow.Please give me feedback on mine.Its down the page,thanks. Steve |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
A 'write' that leaves one with so MUCH to think very carefully about! especially excellent: "voices clamour in my mind. Silences that should be kept Stifled tears that should be wept volcano grows beneath the rug where my memories were swept..." |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"voices clamour in my mind." Oh god, in mine too! Today they insist I stay home and clean the guns. *smile* It is a lonely mind wherein no voice speaks. Thanks Babe, for getting me to read this morning! |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Serenity...First let me say I really like the new photo. This touches my heart deeply and opens old wounds but it serves as sort of a reminder because I have become numb to those old memories but deep in my mind there will always be a special place in my heart for her...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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trutodaraiders Senior Member
since 2006-12-02
Posts 820CA |
The roads curve long in sweet "come on" my soul in ache to taste of more-- Yep that part pulled me in. Thank you for posting this poem it was lovely. Poetry is just the evidence of life. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
wow!!! amazing write! I wish I could find words like this ... very much enjoyed. Be well Roniece |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you all so much. It's an old poem, and I just switched a few words...I almost called it "tweaked"--but..smile... I've been tweaking too long methinks. Thanks you all for your gracious patience. love to all with chuckles to Charly-- and a |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
As always, you have the writers words, and the ability to share them so well. Sandra |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
If you ever get tired of Mr. Wonka, you can send him on up to Ohio. I'd love to pick his brain. Also, love the picture, lady. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing writing Karen! Love the new pic too! ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~ |
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