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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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Time has brought change while coursing through veins although you are here you are no longer near enough to remember us All you can see is what we've come to be for just one moment I wish tht you could recall the softer side of me Please...listen to my plea hear my whispers remember me. an angel, with no halo, and one wing in the fire. {CW} [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (11-30-2006 09:28 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Gentle Spirit Moments fly as time goes buy but you have never lost my eye.  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Sey sweetie, thank you so much for that hug!! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Poignant is the name of the day, dear.   [This message has been edited by Sunshine (11-30-2006 11:50 AM).] |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
You and your words are unforgettable  Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
there is a spiritual love which encompasses all...and this write is no exception... lovely |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
truly 'relationship dejavu'...likely the (tragic) feelin' we have all experienced!: "All you can see is what we've come to be for just one moment I wish that you could recall the softer side of me" an 'every-person' poem....a captured 'slice' of all our lives!.....therefore, a 'write' that wafts along that 'immortal plane'! bravo! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
such pain in this plea song gentle Donna |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Such a soft plea that tugs at the heart ... these words will reach far. Beautiful write. Love, Margherita |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
I am sure they will remember after these fine and gentle words..thank you.. Goldenrose. At the touch of love, everyone becomes poets. Plato 427 BC-348. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I have heard this myself recently sometimes it's just hard to remember some things still, he remembers everything |
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MsSouthernOrchid Member
since 2003-07-12
Posts 192 |
Feelings I know so well. Good read. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
beautifully penned.. Be well Roniece |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Donna, you are whispering my thoughts, or at least, thought I have had. Big hug to you....jo |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Donna...Great write. Tenderly written. Thanks for sharing...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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stevepoet Junior Member
since 2006-12-02
Posts 46 |
very nice. nice rhyming and good concepts |
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trutodaraiders Senior Member
since 2006-12-02
Posts 820CA |
This poem was very touching. |
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