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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2006-11-24 04:48 PM


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It’s odd
How a shade or two
In tone can change a scene

That this dusk light
Filtered through summer leaves
Should suddenly reveal
Someone I hadn’t known before
Was alive

You sit on the lawn
Looking small and frail
The day’s last reflections
In your amber hair

That flows over shoulders
Down arms and breasts . . .
From the past to now
On every woman I see


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passing shadows
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1 posted 2006-11-25 12:30 PM


perfect!
JamesMichael
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2 posted 2006-11-25 08:10 PM


Enjoyed...James
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
3 posted 2006-11-25 09:11 PM



Lovely indeed!!  

Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~
                                    

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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4 posted 2006-11-27 02:21 AM


yes, I agree, a good write!

Be well
Roniece

DejaEntendu
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5 posted 2006-11-27 06:13 AM


I always enjoy your work. I especially like the into paragraph, I think that sums it up best.
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Deep in the heart
6 posted 2006-11-27 09:37 AM


gr8 write

Drauntz
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7 posted 2007-05-14 06:23 PM


How i missed one of your marvelous writings.

it is beautiful.
From a surprise  to a daily scene, the mind just smoothly flowed.

where were you when you saw this? not in every place you can have the feeling that somebody is suddenly alive.

my hairs are standing like over grown grass now.

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