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Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

0 posted 2006-11-11 11:03 PM

I can hear the stars in your eyes
every time you say her name
yet you say there's nothing going on.

I can hear your heart beating
like the summer rain
every time she walks into the room
even as you turn away.

I can feel the cold winter wind
every time you touch me
and its her you're really
wanting to hold.

It doesn't take goodbye
to be gone.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2006-11-12 04:52 AM

You have rendered this particular situation so very well!

(I would say "see" the stars in your eyes instead of "hear", but of course your overall sensitivity makes everything possible!)

Sadly beautiful anyway!

Love,
Margherita

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2006-11-12 07:49 AM

"It doesn't take goodbye
to be gone."

So true, Paula

M

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2006-11-12 11:18 AM

Paula~
I was so glad to see you here ...
but sorrowed that it was with such a sad, beautifully rendered penning~

Sending *Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

aziza
Member Elite

since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

4 posted 2006-11-12 11:24 PM

Sad and so tender.
I was moved.

A

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2006-11-13 07:39 AM

ouch

Jess
Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 243
Washington

6 posted 2006-11-13 07:41 PM

I really felt this. You hooked me from the beginning. I mean that opening line was great. And then the last two lines...and everything in between.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

7 posted 2006-11-13 09:21 PM

so sad

"It doesn't take goodbye
to be gone"

great lines

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

8 posted 2006-11-14 05:16 AM

sad words - hope you see the sunshine soon

Be well
Roniece

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

9 posted 2006-11-15 09:35 PM

Thanks everyone. I gotta say this isn't happening to me...it's just a poem.

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