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Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

0 posted 2006-11-09 09:26 AM

Tides Of Forevermore
~*Marge Tindal*~

Tenderly he placed
Message into a bottle
Set adrift on sea
Sweeping outward it will go
On the tides of evermore~

Swept homeward to heart
Waiting on another shore
Opened, read, cherished
Answered on outgoing tide
Come, find me quickly, my love~

Gentle waves in flow
Bring this one home to adore
Rippling words adrift
on sea of forevermore
Lay resting now on the shore~

~*~

***Just let the word-flow
Grab you and take you along
Add your messages
To this Tanka of adore
Run along the word-seashore***

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2006-11-09 09:42 AM

He sits, reflecting
while summer's first tender blush
stirs winter weary souls...
time for yesteryear's worn dreams
be released unto the sea

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

2 posted 2006-11-09 10:35 AM

How can one improve upon this combined perfection?

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

3 posted 2006-11-09 10:42 AM

Agreeing with Interloper.
Perfect !!
hugs, Chris

"Be yourself; everyone else is already taken." - Oscar Wilde

Betty
Senior Member

since 2002-08-13

Posts 1159
Virginia

4 posted 2006-11-09 11:14 AM

I really like this

sandgrain
Member Elite

since 1999-09-21

Posts 3662
Sycamore, IL, USA

5 posted 2006-11-09 11:47 AM

I could see it bobbing on the waves. Lovely.

Rae

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2006-11-09 11:48 AM

Oh no, my dear friends
Praise will never do at all
Add-On MEANS Add-On
Now get that ink to flowing
It's the least that you can do !

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

7 posted 2006-11-09 12:43 PM

2 for 2!....this is the second time in two days that a ‘write’ from this
grand and lovely ‘poetic voice’ has been a “pier glass and a (magic) potion” for my melancholy soul....‘jiggers’ of healin’ tonic bottled, corked, set with sealing wax and sent driftin’ to all in need across the immortal depths of Time’s eternal sea!
Marge knows words are most ‘precious gems’ to me...I NEVER waste them in idle or superfluous praise! Dearest ‘spirits that be’...I LOVE this poem!.....I ‘oft hesitate to comment on her work...
because its sterling merit is so ‘self-evident’...however, I REALLY couldn’t resist praisin’ this one!....How does she do it?!!!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

8 posted 2006-11-09 01:32 PM

Changing before my
eyes, purple clouds hovering
above the ocean
rise high, higher, into a
range of towering mountains.

*Bruce, she can do it because she is pure in spirit*

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

9 posted 2006-11-09 01:38 PM

I would 'modify' one word in Marge's last line:

Lay resting now (upon) the shore~

when found I.....
the bottle gleaming there
in that moment's fleeting dream....
I wished "love's answer" lay for me
in those time-swept tides of evermore~

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

10 posted 2006-11-09 05:20 PM

Dear Marge:

To the seashore let me go,
To where the tidal ebb and flow,
Brings in the flotsam from the sea
And someday I just know there'll be
A bottle with a message I
Will cherish till the day I die!

Love
Betty Lou

Betty Lou Hebert

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

11 posted 2006-11-09 10:14 PM

would that I but could
write words that would fit
suffice it to say
I would love to play
I am intrigued with your tanka
add on
dear Marge

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

12 posted 2006-11-10 07:52 PM

Thanks everyone !!

ing for John~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

13 posted 2007-05-16 01:25 PM

again, a beautiful piece.

enjoyed

love

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