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AltairVonCreed
Junior Member

since 2006-10-16

Posts 14
Nephi, Utah.

0 posted 2006-10-31 01:04 AM

It seems I live in a make believe world,
Inside a cage I created with words.
A place where sinew is the fabric of time,
And the sky is drawn by skeletal birds.

I live in a place that doesn’t seem to exist,
Where people never relent, hence my screams.
A tomb of negative energy I have built,
From the twisted visions in my dreams.

Trapped in a cage of anger and fury,
The bars buckle under sympathy and distress.
Guarded by blood red hounds of hell,
Which melt in and from the darkness.

My eyes alone hold the story of a pain,
I cannot even begin to voice.
Disguised in a human skin,
In this world devoid of free choice.

I have locked myself deep inside,
A solitary component surrounded by empty space,
Nothing can reach me now,
I am hidden behind a glass face.
Even my thoughts are my own,
I cannot seem to sleep at night.

In fear of dangers that lurk within me,
Obscured from my clouded sight.
But from within my warped prison,
I see the truths of days gone by,
I can experience the pain of life,
And then long eternally to die.

None can understand for I never let them in,
I block out all emotion and blot them from my mind,
Nothing will ever stop me now,
I will move forward and leave everyone behind.

There are people, who try to get in,
They ask strange questions which I cannot comprehend,
They make my cage of words tighter,
And make me hunger for the end.
Eventually they back off and I am left alone,
No one bothers me anymore I have peace at last,
I have finally realised I am not alone,
We are doomed, damned and outcast.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2006-10-31 08:02 AM

Pain and loneliness exude in the well constructed tears that flow this verse.
There seems to be fingers of light, parting gently through cloud covered skies...hope, that someone will see the truth.

To evoke this much emotion from the reader is a sign of not only talent, but fruition of that hope.
TD

sewasham
Senior Member

since 2006-09-11

Posts 714
Oklahoma, USA

2 posted 2006-11-01 09:17 PM

You have portryed some very vivid imagery of loneliness with your words. Well done. Take care and Have fun. Steve

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2006-11-02 08:32 PM

And if you are the creator of this cage, you are also the one who can dismantle it, and step out into whatever is out there beyond the door.
You are the master of your universe. You hold the keys.
Well written, for your words almost draw the reader inside.

AltairVonCreed
Junior Member

since 2006-10-16

Posts 14
Nephi, Utah.

4 posted 2006-11-12 09:07 PM

I realize that this is old, but I only check these forums now and then. I shall have to correct that.

I am honored that some people found my words worthy of their time to read.

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