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Martie
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0 posted 2006-10-30 09:53 PM



For the Moon and Me

I see your fire burning down,
raked up and spitting out summer
until all that bright sun
just crisps and withers in the air.

Now I see you
take the pumpkin of autumn
onto the porch,
and know you sit in cool’s air
watching time moving
into change,
for I can hear your chair
with the thrash of rattan.

The moon squats into the sky
all bloated and filled up,
do you see it in it’s attitude
of forgiveness?
We give it such magic portent
that sometimes it does this wink thing
and I know it is just a moon,
nothing more.

I see the fire of autumn you burn
taking all those youthful tricks
that played you,
along with the midlife crisis,
they flicker into bright shooting stars
before they sigh into a question of degrees.

Read a book of feelings now
with the light in the corner
cushioned and mellow
turning the room to comfortable,
but don’t forget to keep the curtain open
for the moon and me.
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10-26-01

© Copyright 2006 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2006-10-30 10:00 PM


amazing write Martie

gosh! that ending!

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2 posted 2006-10-30 10:02 PM


Ok.....I will. Sounds like a wonderful thing to do!

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3 posted 2006-10-30 10:04 PM


Just beautiful Martie..
The writing I have come to love.
Hugs~Nancy

Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~

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4 posted 2006-10-30 10:04 PM


I agree with Passing Shadows. Great write.
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5 posted 2006-10-30 10:08 PM


Placing this precious piece gently into my library. hugs, Chris

"Be yourself; everyone else is already taken." - Oscar Wilde

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6 posted 2006-10-30 11:01 PM


I really liked it..it was really nice..
good work!

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7 posted 2006-10-30 11:41 PM




I love that winking moon Martie...
you never cease to delight me

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8 posted 2006-10-30 11:44 PM


You plunk such a unique turn of a phrase right in the middle of eash verse that was such a suprise I found myself giving a breathy little start!  So very very good!  Thank you
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9 posted 2006-10-31 12:37 PM


Beautiful piece, Martie.  
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10 posted 2006-10-31 12:19 PM


GR8 piece  
makes me want to add "Blue Hawaii"


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11 posted 2006-11-02 07:59 AM


wonderful Martie - loved it - Paul
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