I Failure (Duet with JuJu)

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Open Poetry #39

I Failure (Duet with JuJu)

Ringo

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since 2003-02-20

Posts 3684
Saluting with misty eyes

0 posted 2006-10-30 06:33 PM

What could be said to undo
Every one of my wrongs?

Leaving along the trail of your fated tears
Never again to brighten the path to my door

If I could I would patch the holes
With my regret to make it better

Yet proving my arrogance and pride again
Proving the fault with in my heart

What could be said to undo
Every one of my wrongs?

Time cannot be undone
Like fate the past is cemented

Preparing statues of my faults
Building monuments of my inadequacies

I Failure

I would like to thank JuJu for assisting me with kicking my muse in the... well, getting her back on track. This was fun, and I highly recommend writing with her for anyone.

You may burn my flag... only after you wrap yourself in it first.
www.myspace.com/mindlesspoet

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2006-10-30 06:43 PM

A most excellent duet!
One I really enjoyed reading.
~Hugs to you both, Nancy~

Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

2 posted 2006-10-30 07:03 PM

Yes, what my sister Enchantress said.

hugs to you both, Chris

"Be yourself; everyone else is already taken." - Oscar Wilde

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2006-10-30 07:45 PM

The blend of this is seamless. Excellent duet, both of you.
TD

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2006-10-30 09:05 PM

outstanding

writergrl
Member

since 2006-10-30

Posts 73
Las Vegas, Nevada

5 posted 2006-10-30 09:18 PM

this is quite provocative and filled with wonderful metaphor and rich imagery...well done!

writergrl

"You cannot stain a black coat."
Nicholas Nickleby

Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

6 posted 2006-10-30 09:58 PM

Thank you Ringo. It was a true pleasure working with you.

-Juju

Ringo

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since 2003-02-20

Posts 3684
Saluting with misty eyes

7 posted 2006-10-31 08:30 AM

Thanks to you all, and- again- thanks to my partner.

You may burn my flag... only after you wrap yourself in it first.
www.myspace.com/mindlesspoet

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