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Self Inflicted Hate
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Self Inflicted Hate |
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Grinch Member Elite
since 2005-12-31
Posts 2929Whoville |
She grinds her heel, stigmata through my fate Like some medusa snakes and all, I should have guessed that pretty lace Could mask the woman that she is. Suspicion crept but dawned too late To catch this dead man in his fall; Too late to side-step; alter pace; To pray the hooks may slip or miss. Cold faced she twists the blade within my back, An Amazon, if Amazons could worry stone. I should have known those kisses hid sharp teeth, A bitter bite to brand me in defeat. She marshalled all in her attack, Sliced flesh for chance to shatter bone; Tore scalp to bury scent beneath, I learned but turned too late in my retreat. Soft hair and eyes that whisper at my sin; An angel staring at the stars asleep, I should have seen the end before it came And temper gripped her with my hate. Tears lay where no tears could have been; When no tears should have shed - I let them weep. A blind man burdened with his blame; A fool to mouth apologies too late. I sowed the seeds that grew the doubt; Claimed principles from paltry acts; Turned rage, false grown, against her light And snuffed what little glimmer stayed. Deaf to the world I flayed about, Struck dumb I twirled against the facts And sought the blind mans loss of sight To hide; excuse each childish turn I made Mine was the reason and the why If truth be bled from lips that lied. She bore the wounds of my disgrace The bruises of my words the silent scar Time glides evaporating tears we cry; Untangling the knots this stupid beggar tied, She paints forgiveness on this unfit face And wedges with my shattered mask hopes door ajar. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Sheesh  Talk about agony and pain!And yet, you sketch a healing portrait at the end. |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
well, she doesn't sound like the type of girl i want to take out on a date or anything |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and this is what I'd like to achieve with my own little epic-- very gracefully written Grinch there was no place that I stammered or stumbled. I would love to write like this --fluid and evocative. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
You have a precise and so sharp style. These emotions written here are vivid, and I felt the pain from several perspectives... Amazing range in your talent, and a deep heart befalls your quill. Have become a fan. TD |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
This is awesome and going directly into my library! hugs, Chris "Be yourself; everyone else is already taken." - Oscar Wilde |
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Grinch Member Elite
since 2005-12-31
Posts 2929Whoville |
Tanks for reading and replying. I wondered whether the rhyme scheme would work so thought I'd give it a try - just for fun. |
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