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ecrivan
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my own state

0 posted 2006-10-19 02:31 AM


Waist lines stretch
family man fills his belt
becomes something contrary
faces warp
cheerful one day
the gain evokes horror
but people are commodities
as are their preserves,
undernourished
to bed hungry
one piece of cloth
sometimes it fits
as scrawny fingers cover
a mothers pursed lips...

Others drape themselves
simple morphs to finery
a robe carries a note
ignorance carries
a starker melody

Waist line expands
globe turn on itself
and I'll stop where
dust covers my toes
cheerful whites on the top
khakis to the knees
this is not about clothes
but how we fill them
exceed belted limits
conflict is enacted
towards a better fit
to better admit
its good to go
without the extra meal

Think warped faces
chew and swallow will you now?
they would give
a right hand
after the left
whatever is left
once the earth cracks
to swallow whole
fringes
excess cloth
from the drapes
that wrapped
food sraps

Another draped in knots
a robe for a despot
waistlines widen
on an urge to fill
others wrap themselves
or are wrapped away
a horrible note
becomes warped melody




[This message has been edited by ecrivan (10-19-2006 12:29 PM).]

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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2006-10-19 06:30 AM


a horrible note
becomes warped melody

good lines... I come away feeling the dismay in your words this morning.
The world (to me) is made up of bits and pieces that just can't seem to make the world puzzle whole.

Always nice to read your thoughts( even if I take  away  a different meaning than intended)

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923
my own state
2 posted 2006-10-19 12:17 PM


Here is yet another poem open for interpretation, the writes are intended to instill thoughts that are not always comfortable and that has been said before, I think by the late Lyra Pierce if not others...
there is a tendency to look at the final lines and come to a conclusion of the whole piece, I do that myself...really it is one reason I like keeping my writes short and sweet so other meanings don't go unnoticed
thanks for putting a word in on how you feel about it though, this one comes across
in 'honor' of the period of Amin.. where 300,000 were conveniently disposed of..they were of a different cloth, you probably see where I was going...


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